Hurting, so cold yet you sweat
Shaking, this isn't the worst yet
Can't sleep, for the need is strong
Can't eat, well I know what's wrong

Come with me
I'll never let you down
I have all you need
And you can have it now
All you have to do
Is give me complete control
I am here for you
I am the devil that you know

I am the devil that you know

Lying, you're eyes are lying
Crying, you feel like you're dying
Shouldn't move, might vomit again
Have to move, the fidgeting doesn't end

Come with me
I'll never let you down
I have all you need
And you can have it now
All you have to do
Is give me complete control
I am here for you
I am the devil that you know

I am the devil that you know

Withdraw
Withdraw
Unto me
I am the devil that you know

I really enjoy the flow of this! Good job.

This has potential.......it's almost there.What you have is good.....now,with a little improvement it could be classic.I know you have it in you,I know what you're going for.(See Dragon Hunt)I'm saying this:with a little "this" a little "that" this could be a monster hit!

Thanks Jut. Thanks Doug, I'll take a look at Dragon Hunt. Any specific pointers you have for this one that will make it a "monster hit"?

Originally Posted by BackInBlack

Thanks Jut. Thanks Doug, I'll take a look at Dragon Hunt. Any specific pointers you have for this one that will make it a "monster hit"?

I was afraid you'd ask that.......all I can do is suggest you change the stuff that's not "great".I'm not in love with the last two lines of the forth verse,that's a start.But,hey,it's your tune.If you think it's as good as you can make it..........just ignore me!(Like everyone else!)

You know I wouldn't ignore you. I'll give it a look and see what I can do. It may be awhile but you'll see an updated version sooner or later.