Heya, here is a bunch of my lyrics any criticism or comments are appreciated, im striving to get far with my lyric writing

What is life?
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What is life?
where does it go?
what is the meaning?
what is the goal?

(Chorus)
ohh yeah
what is life?
ohh tell me
what is my path?
ooh answer me
what is destiny?
ooh hear me
what will i do?

It all seemed so obvious
life is a gift that we hold
but im growing anxious
why am i feeling so cold
am i worrying too much?
miss a light for me to touch
really really i don't know where my life will go
oh somebody, why am i feeling so low?

Im not sure i have a goal
im not sure i am alive
my heart feels like an empty hole
tell me, am i being naive?
is there a destiny?
if so, what is mine?
could somebody just reach into my soul and let me see
feels like a guideline

Ahhh yeah
somebody hear me
please tell me
and answer me
what is life about?
ahh hear me scream
and hear me shout
im feeling like and empty shell
forgotten on the bottom of a dried out well

(Chorus)x2
ohh yeah
what is life?
ohh tell me
what is my path?
ooh answer me
what is destiny?
ooh hear me
what will i do?

Life seems so dark
when you dont know your purpose
give me a sign, give me a mark
and my soul will be to your service
so tell me, what am I?
please answer me
and do not dare to lie
let go of my hand and let me be

LET ME BE!
LET ME SEE!
LET ME LIVE!
LET ME...
find my long lost path
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Death is natural
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Angels crying
their screams pierce the sky
you just keep on lying
only wondering why
are you afraid of something
to not be accepted
your mind is rotting
your codes being decrypted

(chorus)
Hear the yelling of the lost life
smell the pain of the forgotten wife
feel their cold hearts beating no more
so silent you hear the fainting of the core
Yeah, life comes to an end
yeah, the death has caught the scent
yeah, the gatekeeper awaits
yeah, you met by ghosts and wraiths

Energy flows
the time is almost out
cold chill kissing the nose
no time to shout
as your time has come soon
what are you thinking?
has it all been worth it?
to never again see the rising moon

(chorus)
Hear the yelling of the lost life
smell the pain of the forgotten wife
feel their cold hearts beating no more
so silent you hear the fainting of the core
Yeah, life comes to an end
yeah, the death has caught the scent
yeah, the gatekeeper awaits
yeah, you met by ghosts and wraiths

Lost everything
your pride and your life
you would do anything
to make the dead body rise
it is the law of nature
survival of the fittest
hes dead and there is no cure
which so many will detest

Oh no
there is no way around
oh no
dead is a part of life
oh no
let it come late or come soon
oh yes
we are all going to die
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Darkness life
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In these troubled times
when i feel the darkness grab me
I go to seek cover behind your shield
hoping to repel the evil who wants me

Because when i stray too far, i feel the loneliness
and when i walk to far, I feel the emptyness
I wander about aimlessly, in my own world
a world filled with terror and dread
no place to hide

I see the people around me
and I hear their voices loudly
but even in the most crowded places
the damned, scream out for me

I don't need forgiveness
I don't need help
I don't need anyone around me
in my world of the dead

I can pray to my god
I can blame so many others
but in the end I realise
it is I who messed it up

I do need a goal in life
I do need the friends of mine
I do need anything to care for
For i am not dead yet
*silent whisper* "it was a nightmare, they came from the shadows, crawling on all four, i don't want these visions anymore
i hope to one day, be able to see clearly, that life is a gift, to take and hold for eternity"

Because as long as i live i won't give up
as long as i breath i won't give up
as long as i have something to do, my life goes on.
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so, waddya think ?

howls to thee and respect

Edit: i have put in new verse in darkness Life and removed the second verse in What is Life waddya think now?

Hi there! You're lyrics are very good, they're very powerful, but I must say, the first song, What is life? I'm not too keen on the beginning to the lyrics, the first verse is ok, but I think the second one "ooh yeah
im wondering
and im wandering
the dark halls of my inner self
im thinking
and im hungering
my plans and ideas are on the shelf"
I think shoud be removed beacuse I feel it doesn't fit in, thenI think your intro would run smoother and fit together better. I think the best of the two songs is "Darkness life", although I think maybe it needs another verse? Maybe something between the verse that begins "I don't need forgiveness" and the verse that starts "I do need a goal in life" These are obviously my opinions and you may completley disagree with me, which of course is fine! However your lyrics are really good! I think they're fantastic, just need a few tweaks! Very well done! Hope I've helped!

I greatly appreciate your ideas
thank you so much for replying, i was afraid that people wouldnt give a **** about it.

i will take a look at it, and maybe correct it and twist a bit in it

once again, thank you very much

Kind Regards
Silverhowl

Hi again! You are more than welcome! And can I just say that that has greatly improved them! Or at least in my eyes that is! I feel they're much better now! So very well done! I'm impressed with them and I'm just glad I could help!

ok... i know this song may be kinda selfish... its dedicated to my glorious race, hope you like it

What we truely are

*howl*
Awrooooooh
*speaking*
oh... look to the sky, do you see what i see?
the fullmoon has arrived... that means...

When the fullmoon is rising in the night
im getting a feeling that i cannot fight
i don't wish to either for it is good
going to city hunting for food

(chorus)
I feel the changing
i feel the changing
my true face is this
the moon has given me the kiss
blessed me with wisdom and power
when the time hits the 12th hour
and the moon shines bright on the sky

My paws pondering the ground
some think im just a hound
but they will know soon enough
that hiding from me is kinda tough

(chorus)
I feel the changing
i feel the changing
my true face is this
the moon has given me the kiss
blessed me with wisdom and power
when the time hits the 12th hour
and the moon shines bright on the sky

*howl*
Awroooooooh
*speaking*
the changing has got the grip on me
don't just stand there you fool
you better run
then you will maybe live a little longer
*laugh*
Too late, here i come

(chorus)
I feel the changing
i feel the changing
my true face is this
the moon has given me the kiss
blessed me with wisdom and power
when the time hits the 12th hour
and the moon shines bright on the sky

I can taste the blood
everywhere on the street like a flood
im no longer human
you try to do what nobody can

Load the rifle take a good aim
pitifull humans your guns are so lame
Look in my eyes, what do you see?
the wolf that i am have been set free

*howl*
Awrooooooooh

(chorus)
I feel the changing
i feel the changing
my true face is this
the moon has given me the kiss
blessed me with wisdom and power
when the time hits the 12th hour
and the moon shines bright on the sky

*howl*
Awroooooooooh

Those lyrics are very good! I like the theme behind it and the way that you've written it! It's very well written, makes the audience believe that they are the character and as if they could have written it! And I like the way that you incorporate speaking parts as well, I think that that fits in well with the theme of the song and they are well spaced as well so they don't bore you! Very well done! I like them!

Thanks alot appreciate the comments

i do my best to give everything of me in the lyrics i write, but its only when im in my creative corner i can come up with something... and when i have a subject to write about hehe... any suggestions maybe?

Awroooooooh
once again thanks

Silverhowl

Can I just say that those are your best lyrics yet! They are really heartfelt and make the reader/listener empathise with you! Those are very well written, they contain alot of feelings behind the words! I wouldn't change anything with those lyrics! Fantastic!

Thanks you greatly appreciated
Awroooooooh

Here is a song about, you know those mornings, you are completely busted and just want to sleep forever right?


Sleeper

My cellphone is beebing
but i am still sleeping
i used it as alarm
but my bed is so comfortably warm

its six in the morning
i stretch my body while yawning
i wish i could sleep longer
but i have been taken by the hunger

(chorus)
I hate the mornings
but in a way i love them
i have got several warnings
if you say that, you may never wake up again
just because i don't like to get up
my alarm keeps beebing me
hugging my pillow, i want it to stop
please sunshine, go away and leave me be

Wish it would stay dark forever
the chance for a day without light is never
i got the sunshine coming from my window
please lord, why can't it just go?

i prefer to sleep long
but dont worry there is nothing wrong
i just dont like the morning thats all
turning around, facing the wall

well my good people, i bid you goodnight
before you leave please shut off the light
i will sleep for the rest of the day
and dont disturb me for else i will be mad okay?

(chorus)
I hate the mornings
but in a way i love them
i have got several warnings
if you say that, you may never wake up again
just because i don't like to get up
my alarm keeps beebing me
hugging my pillow, i want it to stop
please sunshine, go away and leave me be

Hey there! Those lyrics are really good! I like the theme behind it! I think that most people tend to have those type of mornings! Lol! The only thing that I would suggest is that you change the word "beebing" with beeping, that would fit better and also in the line "i used it as alarm" I'd just change it to I used it as an alarm, but otherwise that's good the way that it is! I like it! Well done!

Here is a new song from me
its a more dark one, hope you like it

Broken soul
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I can see it in your eyes
the sorrow and the pain
floating like butterflies
your soul is beaten and slain

it is not worth the trouble
to say your opinion
your mind is left in rubble
and you are nothing but a minion

(chorus)
Oh my you are so pitifull
your tears staining your cheek
the world is not mercyfull
blood in your face from the freak
think about it one more time
laying in the dirt soaked in sorrow
all you do is whimper and whine
don't cry, it will all end tomorrow

You can feel the touch
the burning sensation
don't like to watch
hand shiver in tension

countless scars on your wrist
your soul is in disorder
in pain you tighten your fist
your life getting shorter

(Mid song special chorus)
Broken soul
broken soul
broken soul
why is the world so cruel?
why is life not worth living?
why is your soul so broken?
why is your mind so dark?

(chorus)
Oh my you are so pitifull
your tears staining your cheek
the world is not mercyfull
blood in your face from the freak
think about it one more time
laying in the dirt soaked in sorrow
all you do is whimper and whine
don't cry, it will all end tomorrow

Sorrow
pain
broken soul

why so sad my friend?
dont you know where your soul went?
its not with you anymore
your mind is a crumbled core

(chorus)
Oh my you are so pitifull
your tears staining your cheek
the world is not mercyfull
blood in your face from the freak
think about it one more time
laying in the dirt soaked in sorrow
all you do is whimper and whine
don't cry, it will all end tomorrow

Ok, its a while since i last posted some songs, so here is a bunch.

Concerns
-dedicated to my good friends in Illinois Pat and Kri, im sorry for you-

Some might think it is odd
some might think im strange
all i do is smile and nod
im concerned at this range

i havent known you for so long
even so im still concerned
hell you might think it is wrong
to care for someone i have learned

(chorus)
Just remember im right here
if you need to talk or cry
you dont have anything to fear
just let your feelings fly
because i will be right here
listening to all your worries
if you have anything to say
i will listen to you all the way

You say i shouldnt have pity
nor be so concerned about it
I know you are feeling shitty
and that you feel trapped in a pit

i just want to know you will be okay
because i do care about how you feel
it doesnt matter that im this far away
that i will listen to you is a deal

(chorus)
Just remember im right here
if you need to talk or cry
you dont have anything to fear
just let your feelings fly
because i will be right here
listening to all your worries
if you have anything to say
i will listen to you all the way

*speak*
Just know that im right here
to listen to your worries
if you dont feel right
and need someone to talk to
i will be right here
to listen to your words


(chorus)
Just remember im right here
if you need to talk or cry
you dont have anything to fear
just let your feelings fly
because i will be right here
listening to all your worries
if you have anything to say
i will listen to you all the way
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Killer spirit ( this song is based on the melody "nirvana - Smells like teen spirit")

1.
You pissed
me off
now im
coming for
your head
just for
fun i will
do this
i'll drink
your blood
make you
suffer for
your wrongs

watch out x16

omk.
when i find you
i will kill you
when you see me
better run fast
have no mercy
i will rip you
when you see me
gotta know this

im a killer
freakin killer
have no mercy
for my victim
yeah!

2.
Cut with
dull blade
i tear
you up
let blood
spill forth
i drink
you dry
i hear
you scream
i love
it so i
cut you
even more
now die

watch out x16

omk.
when i find you
i will kill you
when you see me
better run fast
have no mercy
i will rip you
when you see me
gotta know this

im a killer
freakin killer
have no mercy
for my victim
yeah!

3.
the hunt
is good
but capture
you alive
so good
it makes
me smile
your blood
is hot
let it
flowing down
my throat
i laugh
of you


watch out x16

omk.
when i find you
i will kill you
when you see me
better run fast
have no mercy
i will rip you
when you see me
gotta know this

im a killer
freakin killer
have no mercy
for my victim

im a killer
im a killer
im a killer
im a killer
i will kill you
i will kill you
i will kill you
i will drink you
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Evil mindness
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Doubtfull servant
to the abyss master
feeling his wrath in his head
screaming in pain for his mercy

neglected again and again and again
doubtfull servants cry for mercy
never be see never to be heard
whiplash slashing the back asunder

blood flowing from the wounds of the mortal
wicked mind laughing in satisfaction
defragmentation of the brain
rain pondering the roof

hard hits in the face
thought and emotions long gone
nothing but madness is left now
the feeling of the fist

crushing skull and snapping bones
die now die filthy scum
blood drunk in wild eyes
the fear of the holy

unholy pleasure for the wicked creatures
never mock the master
of the vengeful claw
tearing through organs

tears staining the blood red carpet
no forgiveness
no mercy
no sorrow in the struck

pure anger rush for the unprepared
ripping and slaughtering to lamb
hacking and slashing the fool
a cool breeze to cool the wounds

deepfreeze the morale of the dead
nothing is ready for this
no one is prepared for you
gates of hell opening my inner self

the demon from the other side
moving trough vengefull scent of regret
now leave me be
slay my foe for his will to be undone
beasts of the nether hear my call
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Vacation

Im sitting with my catalogue
my thoughts are high but laying low
i don't know where to go
i need to get out of here
want to go here and there
makeing me stay is not fair

(chorus)
I wanna go see the sun
i wanna go have some fun
i need a vacation soon
enjoying the beach under the fullmoon
i would like to see the snowy hills
actonfilled vacation is what kills
i need relaxing times to be happy
my vacation is not going to be crappy

What would be the best for me?
what would i really like to see?
where would i really like to be?
The sunny beach or snowy peaks?
Suburbian area filled with freaks?
how bout a place filled with greeks?


(chorus)x2
I wanna go see the sun
i wanna go have some fun
i need a vacation soon
enjoying the beach under the fullmoon
i would like to see the snowy hills
actonfilled vacation is what kills
i need relaxing times to be happy
my vacation is not going to be crappy

Now i know what i want to do
what i want to is be with you
where you go i will go too
North south east or west
to be with you is the best
holding you tight to my chest
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On the hunt

Wicked sick you make me
hear it it is what you cannot see
smell it what could it be?
i know it its my prey on the run

Run run run
flee run for cover
scream now i found you
blood i will swallow
good times claws will shred you
feel it immense pain in your chest

(chorus)
Scream run flee maggot flee
cry and call for help
no one will hear you
no one will see you
as im ripping up your throat

damn unfortunate you are
to meet me in the night
as i am no longer human
no longer in control
i will slay you without mercy
slay you without remorse

( instrumental solo )

RUN!
i found you
i caught you
i eat you
i need you
quench the hunger im born with
the hunger for flesh
the craving for blood
the undescribeable feeling of joy
when the fullmoon rise on the sky

(chorus)
Scream run flee maggot flee
cry and call for help
no one will hear you
no one will see you
as im ripping up your throat

(drums end out)
*howl*
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Ya know the drill ^^ comment or criticism, shoot im all ears

Did you really write those songs? I write some myself but yours are so deep so meaningful. They're pretty good from what I can see. It looks like you might have some anger issues though.

Howdy you! Again all i have to say is that your writing most definitely does improve each time! They're really well written! I enjoyed reading them, so if they were to be played I would almost definitely enjoy listening to the lyrics! Good work! Keep it up!

Me? anger issues? u dont say
im very filled with anger, because of my childhood...and because i AM what i AM
anyways im happy you like my lyrics

and thx to you too Spud ^^ good to know i get better

i will write some more soon i hope

So here i am again... inspired by a little subject me and Spudmonkey have been talking about:

I can feel it, but not see it
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Its out in the darkness
feeding on my fear
its lifeforce strenghtens
for every nervous breath
its what i dont know
its what i cant see
but i can say its here for me
and it wont let me go

(chorus)
I can, i can, i can
i can feel it
i cant, i cant, i cant
i cant see it
i feel, i feel, i feel
i feel its breath
it is, it is, it is
it is unknown to me

So many thoughts
the dark clouds
twisted fear and depression
glowing red in the shadow
leave me evil one
torment me no more
can i meet you face to face
show yourself to me

(drum solo)

it stares at me from the dark
boney hand reaches for me
the death prevail
twists my mind
scream of the cursed
help me hide
the cold chill along my spine
and the moonshine in my face

(chorus)
I can, i can, i can
i can feel it
i cant, i cant, i cant
i cant see it
i feel, i feel, i feel
i feel its breath
it is, it is, it is
it is unknown to me
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waddya think of this one?

I can quite honestly say that, that is your best written song to date yet! Very powerful! Very nice!

Ok...so i was bored today...and im starting to get really mad... and the reason if for me to know, and for you to find out :P lol, anyways, i wrote this song ^^
its not really a theme, just random words ans such ^^ hope u like it


Hell Hole
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belief!
always in the mind!
sickness!
always under the skin!
sorrow!
always in the heart!
screams of the past!
tormet your soul!
feel the pain!
that they felt!
a thousand times over!
for you shall be torn!
and shredded eternally!
in the pits of doom!

(chorus)
You can curse!
and scream!
swear on my corpse!
but no matter!
what you do!
its your end which!
is closing in!

wounds!
i will deliver!
pain!
you shall recieve!
fear!
you will me!
think what you did!
now what will you get!
so take it!
or leave it!
but always remember!
death is right here!
when its your time!
you will embrace it!

Suffer!
mother****er!
suffer!
****ing maggot!
suffer!
and scream in pain!
you want relief!
from the pain i cause!
you want to die now?!
just say so!
and it will be done!

(chorus)
You can curse!
and scream!
swear on my corpse!
but no matter!
what you do!
its your end which!
is closing in!

done!
now its over!
finish!
your dead body!
rotting!
your mind is now!
safe trip to hell!
for thats where you go!
enjoy the stay!
and burn eternally!
in the flaming pit!
which i call home!

jeje hey... u know i like ur lyrics, i just wanna be subscribed to this tread to read ur new songs

ttyl