im only 12 years old and i wrote this rap in 15 minutes

verse 1
yo my name is gangstap
anyone wanna do a shoppin spree
any girl wanna be my ho
all i do is hustle and flow
but i smoke so much weed
you wouldnt f***ing belive
verse 2
i can fly
only when im high
yo im a dope rpper
and im a hardcore scrapper
any girl wanna be my girl just step to the stage
and i wont have a motherf***in rampage
verse3
holy sh*t their go's gravity
here comes motherf***ing reality i have to have rejoice
every time i hear the sound of their voice
i motherf***ing invoke
for more coke
and you cant fade
when you get laid
yo i play a sport hockey
and a lot of people say im cockey
verse4
you can i get my **** sucked
do you wanna get ****ed
yo girls just remember just step to the stage
and i wont have a mother****in rampage
verse 5
you a kid said i cant rap
now look at me hes
probbaly crying out mother ****in jeoulousy
i told him not to mess with me
verse 5
yo any girl wanna come home with me
because my name is gangstap
yo turn that frown the other way around
or ill be getting my **** sucked and you will not be getting ****ed

verse 1
yo my name is gangstap
anyone wanna do a shoppin spree
any girl wanna be my ho
all i do is hustle and flow
but i smoke so much weed
you wouldnt f***ing belive
verse 2
i can fly
only when im high
yo im a dope rpper
and im a hardcore scrapper
any girl wanna be my girl just step to the stage
and i wont have a motherf***in rampage
verse3
holy sh*t their go's gravity
here comes motherf***ing reality i have to have rejoice
every time i hear the sound of their voice
i motherf***ing invoke
for more coke
and you cant fade
when you get laid
yo i play a sport hockey
and a lot of people say im cockey
verse4
you can i get my **** sucked
do you wanna get ****ed
yo girls just remember just step to the stage
and i wont have a mother****in rampage
verse 5
you a kid said i cant rap
now look at me hes
probbaly crying out mother ****in jeoulousy
i told him not to mess with me
verse 5
yo any girl wanna come home with me
because my name is gangstap
yo turn that frown the other way around
or ill be getting my **** sucked and you will not be getting ****ed

yo its phil why dont any one put any votes for me its the best up there

Originally Posted by PimpinPhil

holy sh*t their go's gravity
here comes motherf***ing reality i have to have rejoice
every time i hear the sound of their voice

Listen to Eminem much?

phil, no one responds because that was one of the worst raps ever written
not just in terms of lyrical skill either,
you've ripped raps off two of the most known rappers ever (i hardly need to name them) and called 6 bars a verse!
download some instrumentals - or, better yet, make your own - and see how well it fits. verses have to be written to a certain length. Write down any song that you like and you'll notice that allt he verses are about the same length. most will be 36 bars, a lot of guys in australia (where i am) tend to do longer ones, especially when the subject they're rapping on is more serious, like illest's. in that case it'll be 72 bar verse. hooks can obviously be shorter, but still 8 or 16 bars.

so, you've got none of your own lyrical skill and technically your rap is absolutely terrible.

but illest, you have some real talent, hope you got sum1 reliable makin beats for you

[**** you aspo your a little ***** i would like you to do better then that you lil fagit your a gay lil meggit man i didnt even copy anybody you ****in lil fagit yea i agree i have to make longer verses but **** you i didnt copy anybody ill ****in kill you you lil ***** you deserve to get shot you ****in disrespect me i ****in hate you you ****in punk *** *****

yo i challenge you to a rap battle you little ***** you go first

yo my name is gangsta.p
anyone wanna live free
yo keep your feet on the peddel
it can get pretty crazy in the ghetto
yo move out of the way when im bashing throu
i really dont want to run over you
yo im a gangsta my name is gangsta.p
so you better start respecting me
you im a pimp
i aint no wimp
yo you want to have sex with me
first you have to look at my biography
boom boom chop
ya thats whats up
yo you sure
are an amature
yo dont pull anything stupid *****
i dont want to pop a trigga
yo f***ing hardcore drugs
are only for real thugs
yo only god can judge me motherf***er
dont be a co** succer

yo aspo i dont listen to eminem i only listen too the game and t.i and sometimes young jeezy

aspo250 is a big ****in *****
I am goin hunt him down like a deer
he is a big ****ing homo
i'll track him down by the sent of his b.o.
ur from britain u must have messed up teeth
i'll bary u in the ground 6 feet beneath
remember my name gansta P
u better never **** with me!!

yo aspo your a fagit
your a gay little magget
man i got green apple on my chain
go suck on your mom's pole dang
man **** you hey
why are you so gay
your a ****ing *****
what the hell is up with that glitch
man what the hell is the matter with you
just dont ****ing **** with my crew
sss

hey PimpinPhil, I just had to log on to explain to you that skill
Is nothing derived from the covers of Ill Bill.
You just cant jump on with some lyrics that you steal
From the writing of an ARTIST and think that you are real.
And as I see it, this is Illest's post
And I think its kinda rude of you to just but in and boast.
This is nothing new to me Ive been writing lyrics for years
So many scraps of paper it would just confuse your ears
So quit the braggin there young dragon sit back and whipe your tears
Your just draggin on and making your self look like a.... potato.. haha

Nice, Flangie. Oh, By the way, Illest, you do have some talent. Keep going with it, and Mr. Phil, don't steal lyrics. It's pointless. Kthx.

I am not trying to be mean or anything I just think you should work harder.

shred******

Originally Posted by flangie

hey PimpinPhil, I just had to log on to explain to you that skill
Is nothing derived from the covers of Ill Bill.
You just cant jump on with some lyrics that you steal
From the writing of an ARTIST and think that you are real.
And as I see it, this is Illest's post
And I think its kinda rude of you to just but in and boast.
This is nothing new to me Ive been writing lyrics for years
So many scraps of paper it would just confuse your ears
So quit the braggin there young dragon sit back and whipe your tears
Your just draggin on and making your self look like a.... potato.. haha

yo, Phil, you just got told, man

Phil, you're a uckfin fag for real... Post your own topic and I'll ridicule that one... Your so called "Raps" have no content and if you knew what you were doing, you'd know a verse usually consists of 16 bars... not 4 lines.

by the way phil... your lyrics are garbage... try to practice a little more... thats wut i did and now my lyrics are HOTTTT!

remember- practice makes perfect

insperation, crazy flow, now im very lyrical
find a hook, your verses soggy, rhythm like old cerial
rhyming is not for the weak, i bench press every metaphore
lyrics high like attic ceilings, yours is like the basement floor
take these rules for granit, i could do without your attitude
tellin people suck your ***** pathetic and its very rude
eat weak rappers up, like i have no other means of food
let you hear it one last time, your flow is slow like special school
-- Phat Chris

hahahahahahaha

Originally Posted by PimpinPhil

yo its phil why dont any one put any votes for me its the best up there

yo dog u ****in rocked it dude e-mail me bigdizme@hotmail.com man u fickin rock

yah men u rock!!! im rapper D but jus call me D