Hey guys,
I'm working on a song right now, and I'm happy with most of the lyrics. But there are a couple of lines that aren't sitting too well with me. Can anyone give me some suggestions how to improve them? The ones I don't like are marked with an asterisk (*).
Verse 1
In the morning I look out the window
See the traffic drifting below
*All alone and feeling so apart
With my coat and boots in the winter
Crossing the plaza where in the summer
*You held my hand and in it was my heart
Chorus
The streets they have history
Puts me in a day dream
Walking through my memories
*Keeps my mind wandering
*All that I can tell you
*Is that I still want to
Hold your body close to
My heart beating, feel it beating
Verse 2
On the train I keep my eyes closed
As the buildings rush past the windows
*I’m in motion but keeping very still
In the streetlights I watch my shadow
Pass the door where so long ago
*We were there, our hearts completely filled
Chorus
Any suggestions would be much appreciated. Cheers!