I like it. Suggested changes follow:
Your life slowly drains from the veins you’ve severed.
or
Life is slowly draining from the veins you’ve severed.
to deep ---> too deep
habbit ---> habit
When the light is calling, will you try to back out?
The verses in the refrain and the bridge appear to be "lighter weight" than the rest of the poem. Try something like:
(refrain)
Break the habit,... it's not pain for which you live.
Drop the blade,... it's life's pain you must forgive.
Reach out, I'l show you how,
But if you don’t stop now,
I’ll be at your grave saying
or
It's not pain for which you live.
It's life's pain you must forgive.
Reach out, I'll show you how,
Break the habit, you must stop now
Or I’ll be at your grave saying
(bridge)
Now your fxcked up more then ever,
and your life has drained from veins severed.
The pain, it leaks through your grave,
and through death you’ve finally been saved.
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