Deal made with the devil [rap/metal]

ITS UNFINISHED..........

IM PLAYING RUSSIAN ROULETTE WITH A AUTOMATIC GUN.
I GOT A FULL CLIP AND IT ONLY TAKES ONE.
IM LIVING FOR TODAY TOMARROW WONT SEE THE SUN.
SO NOW I SAY GOODBYE TO MY UNBORN SON.
I KNOW IT AINT THAT BAD BUT IM TIRED OF THE STRESS.
AND EVERY STEP I TAKE FELLS LIKE IM CLOSER TO DEATH.
AND THINK BACK TO WHATS LEFT...
IM SORRY TO MY FAM...
I MAKE THIS SELFISH ACT CAUSE I NEVER GAVE A DAM.
IM FEELING KIND OF LOST DONT KNOW JUST WHO I AM.
NO TIME FOR SECOUND THOUGHTS I JUST LET THE HAMMER BAM.
AND THE HAMMERS RELEASED AND THEN RELEASED FROM MY HAND.
THE GOOD DIE YOUNG 22's MY LIFE SPAND.

AND NOW MY HEARTS... STOPPED BEATING...
I HAVE NOW BEEN LAYED TO REST!!!!!
I MIGHT HAVE DIED... BUT IM NOT LEAVING...
CAUSE I STILL HAVE TASK THAT'S LEFT!!!!
A DEAL MADE WITH THE DEVIL!!!!!

I WAS HELLBOND SO IM WORSHIPED BY THE FLAMES.
EVIL SEED EVIL DEEDS WICKED LITTLE THINGS.
BIT#H NI@@AS ROCK THE BLING.
I AINT NEVER WANNA STUNT..
THERE WAS CRACKHEADS ON THE CONER MAN AND HOMELSS IN THE FRONT
NO TELL ME WHAT THE FUC* YOU ON.
ALL THESE GOONS AND THESE GOBLINS.
YA NI@@AS BANG HARD BUT A NI@@A STRAIT MOBBING.
WITH DEATH RIGHT BESIDE HIM.
WE BOTH IN BLACK HOODIES.
DRESSED UP FOR A MISSION.
MILITANT LIKE WE SHOULD BE.

AND NOW MY HEARTS... STOPPED BEATING...
I HAVE NOW BEEN LAYED TO REST!!!!
I MIGHT HAVE DIED... BUT IM NOT LEAVING...
CAUSE I STILL HAVE TASK THAT'S LEFT!!!!
A DEAL MADE WITH THE DEVIL!!!!

so nice

yo its iite
Just sounds a bit fake
diversify your rap man, multi syllables in there, step away from mono syllabic rap patterns if you want to stand out.

good potential