"Now You're Gone" (working title and incomplete)

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  1. singthesorrowx666's Avatar

    singthesorrowx666 said: 04-03-2010 10:22 AM

    Post "Now You're Gone" (working title and incomplete)

    verse 1:

    Let the light just touch your face
    No longer here, his soul set free
    Let the darkness fade away
    No longer here, where all hope bleeds


    chorus maybe:

    Some might say you can live another way
    Just fight the blame and let sorrow decay
    Live your life, move on from the sadness
    But I can't let you go


    ---xxxx---

    oh... and I don't mean for my lyrics to be so annoying, I just try to get my point across in words that sound good with a thick riff

    so, let me know what you think xx
    Crash and burn/All the stars explode tonight/How'd you get so desperate?/How'd you stay alive?/Help me please/Burn the sorrow from your eyes/Oh, come on be alive again/Don't lay down and die
     

  2. J - M's Avatar

    J - M said: 04-03-2010 04:31 PM

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    i love the first verse, think it flows beautifully. don't really like the last line on the chorus though. But overall it sounds good so far, write the rest!