Heaven or Hell

There are just two places to come
When you are leaving and you´re gone
Heaven is for all god slavers
And Hell is for evil sinners
It´s been and it´s going to be…for you and me

Bridge 1:
It´s easy to believe in something
That´s nice fairytale
It must be really amazing
To the other side to sail

Chorus:
Heaven or Hell - there is no place when we are leaving
Heaven or Hell - it´s a make of our thoughts
Heaven or Hell - on our Earth we are creating
Heaven or Hell - it´s our choice

Heaven or Hell is here and now
Not up above or down below
Which empire is ruling
It depends on our doing
There are just devils and angels…but among us

Bridge 2:
Stop thinking of life after death
Wake up from dreaming
We can create Heaven on Earth
During our living

Chorus:
Heaven or Hell - there is no place when we are leaving
Heaven or Hell - it´s a make of our thoughts
Heaven or Hell - on our Earth we are creating
Heaven or Hell - it´s our choice

Believe me it´s not a lie
As it is you´re gonna die

Have a nice afterlife in Heaven or Hell

All i can say is wow,
This is really quite good you should record some music for the background

I wouldn't be able to prove it scientifically, of course, but even if I didn't know you were Czech by origin I would bet that it was written by a Slav person !!!

There's something in the way you create sentences, the syntax that you use here and also in the way you translate your ideas into the lyrics that's so close to my way of seeing things and thinking !

I like the main idea of the lyrics. However, truth be said, these lyrics are somewhat weaker than your previous songs/poems; maybe because of the black and white duality used throughout the lyrics, eg. good/evil - devils/angels - god slavers/evil sinners, while in reality there are more shades of grey on the palette...

On the other hand, though, verse 2:
"Heaven or Hell is here and now
Not up above or down below
Which an empire is ruling
It depends on our doing
There are just devils and angels…but among us"
is very gracious, indeed!

I wouldn't be myself if I didn't add the following comments (to the best of my knowledge ):
- there shouldn't be "an" between which and empire in verse 2;
- you rather wake up from dreaming (bridge 2);
- "It´s easy to believe something / That´s nice fairytale" - I'd add 'in" after "believe" (bridge 1);

- during our living - hmmmm this is correct, of course, but what would you say to "while we're still living";
- "there is no place when we are leaving" - as I understand, this refers to the opening phrase but ... something's not right in this sentence - the use of "when" as opposed to "place" is misleading;
- "As it is you´re gonna die" - do you mean: "As it is, you're gonna die" or "As it is you who's gonna die"?

Bests from WAW, Paul

Originally Posted by Aidanr14

All i can say is wow,
This is really quite good you should record some music for the background

Thank you. I´m glad you like. Sorry, no music. Music is only in my head

Originally Posted by Paul Orhan

I wouldn't be able to prove it scientifically, of course, but even if I didn't know you were Czech by origin I would bet that it was written by a Slav person !!!

There's something in the way you create sentences, the syntax that you use here and also in the way you translate your ideas into the lyrics that's so close to my way of seeing things and thinking I like the main idea of the lyrics. However, truth be said, these lyrics are somewhat weaker than your previous songs/poems; maybe because of the black and white duality used throughout the lyrics, eg. good/evil - devils/angels - god slavers/evil sinners, while in reality there are more shades of grey on the palette...

On the other hand, though, verse 2:
"Heaven or Hell is here and now
Not up above or down below
Which an empire is ruling
It depends on our doing
There are just devils and angels…but among us"
is very gracious, indeed!

Thank you.
You´re right that my lyrics show non english person in verse building and thoughts

Originally Posted by Paul Orhan

I wouldn't be myself if I didn't add the following comments (to the best of my knowledge ):

No it´s okay. I appreciate your grammar advices

Originally Posted by Paul Orhan

- "there is no place when we are leaving" - as I understand, this refers to the opening phrase but ... something's not right in this sentence - the use of "when" as opposed to "place" is misleading;

There could be "there is no place where we are leaving". I thought it like in time when we are leaving there is no place where we go.

Originally Posted by Paul Orhan

- "As it is you´re gonna die" - do you mean: "As it is, you're gonna die" or "As it is you who's gonna die"?

It means: "As it is, you're gonna die"