There's some hope left...

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  1. Pranav said:

    Default There's some hope left...

    Well, this is my second lyric after I'm still there... Please critique on it. thanks a lot.
    Whenever you think, hope is not around,
    Searched it everywhere, nowhere it’s found.
    Don’t just panic, and don’t just cry,
    Because we have to, we’ve gotta to survive.

    Chorus:
    As there’s some hope left,
    There, here and there.
    As there’s some hope left,
    That you just can’t see.

    Look into my eyes, and just believe it,
    We gotta fight it back, we gotta live it.
    We can’t just stay here, standing as stone………..
    When our people are in trouble, When world is so lone………

    Chorus:
    As there’s some hope left,
    There, here and there.
    As there’s some hope left,
    That you just can’t see.

    If we act like this, and behave the same,
    Just as we turn away, forgetting our aim.
    Closing your eyes, think what we’re leaving back,
    Is there something, something that we, do lack…
    But we got to survive!!

    Chorus:
    As there’s some hope left,
    There, here and there.
    As there’s some hope left,
    That you just can’t see….
    There’s some hope left,
    A bit of it…
    That you……. Just can’t see!! Yeah!
    Thanks a lot again!
     
  2. Pranav said:

    Default Please give me reply on this.

    Thanks.
     
  3. tony5592 said:

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    I have a question what kind of hope is the song searching for?, is it world hope for peace, is it a religious hope that people stop sining, is it a hope for love between two people. I like some of the lyrics a lot, I don't think it flows just right, needs some fine tuning as far as that goes, exwe gotta fight it back, we gotta live it, ) maybe go with (we gotta fight back, we can't surrender it) but i don't know what " it is" so it's tough, I will help you though or at least try to.
     
  4. Pranav said:

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    Thanx a lot. Well, it's only my second song - first being " I'm still there" which is posted in this section, you can view it, I think that's much better. This song tells of a war, As you can see the lines, We can’t just stay here, standing as stone………..
    When our people are in trouble, When world is so lone……… ) this tells that their world, which is there people and country is lonely and in trouble, They have been losing till now, but their is still some hope left to save their country, which is their inner hope and some other striving with them. So this was the song about.And your corrections were very good! I really liked your advice. Thanks a lot for it. And, I will be too glad if you can help me anyway. Thanks a lot again, i really liked your crtitique right to the point. Thanxxxx!!