Can someone write these lyrics?

Srry if this is the wrong forum feel free to move it
I need someone to write a song about someone who is always judged and tries to turn their back on the people judging them...if that made sense

how long of a song? Rap or other? How many verses and hooks? or do you need somthing to get you started.

Pm me...

Eight Bars, Three Verse
Creese Wright the hook or chorus if you want. I'm done...




Treated as a doormat, walked over, feeling dirty,
Taking too much at once, to the point my stomachs turning.
I feel sick from what is said,I dread whats ahead.
Tempers burning red hot ,Swallowing down what I'm fed.
I turn the other cheek avoiding confrontation.
Let roll of my back, I don't need more compilations.
I seek for an answer nothing but problems come to me.
I'm not a criminal so How come everyone is judging me?


I Just turn me back this is my only plan.
I have no time for this, so I'll be the bigger man.
No one can judge me, but the mirror I gaze in to.
I've learned to Empathize for what you've been through.
I hold no grudge, My skin is like leather conditioned hold the barrier.
You can't break it ,so keep throwing stones, I can take it ,the more the merrier.
It's not your fault, I blame the parents for what they taught you.
All you will see is my back as I walk away,I'll let Karma haunt you.



You say fiction no facts, you have green eyes, filled with jealousy.
La LA La .Pay attention.. I'm not listening to what your telling me..
My fingers are pressed in my ears, it appears you won't stop.
Keep the hatred in your heart till you pop, I'll stay on the top.
I makes you angry don't it, you still can't make me frown.
Fill your pool full of lies, but I won't let you drown.
I'll let remorse take your breath..let it rip out out your soul
Then you will be judged ,where every go I'll prey for you it's not down..

There you go .I hope you like it... Tell me what you think.

Writen by Sk'n Deep

I'm stucked between mouths spelling my name wrong
I'm covered with eyes seeing me in the wrong direction
I'm a one man resolution
Followed by your disciple
You shout words at me
Pretending it's an honest symphony
To make a special ground for me

My spines are starting to take it's turn
Leaving you in a pointless echelon
I'm my own witness and I know exactly what you mean
I'm sorry but I'm not what you think I am
I'm sorry but I'm not who you say I am

I'm a writer and I'm writing my goodbye letter
Fix your mind and hate me for what I am
Don't fake your guts on me
If you're holding something better
If you're blushing red when I'm not seeing
Dare me the truth that I never buy your words
If you're taking me down
At least take me down under my grave

Your lies are not as white as your shirt
Don't make any excuses to write my name on your blueprints
You're marching an army
Sent to destroy nothing real
You're firing bullets
But you won't take me down
Because my hair has fallen as much as enough
I won't care
I'm not falling into your trap



That's all I've got, maybe it's not good enough but you can tell me what you think about it

Failedson It looks like S&L may Have something to work with regardless which one is picked we both were more than generous to let a hand...This was big on your part. Using your own personal time to benefit a follow member..that's new...good efforts on both our parts...

Anyone eles want to work on the chorus? maybee a verse or two. S&L came to us for help whats your views?

.@ S&L
You a fortunate to have so many talented writers to help you out. Take advantage of this opportunity...not to many people would do this but I know of some that might...

haha yeah, i was thinking to post something on other's thread and came up to this

so Saybers, what do you think of our lyrics?

0.0 im actually speechless
Both of the lyrics were amazing and im more than thankful for the help. Building on what Sk'nDeep said, i was surprised that anyone would help. Then when i seen failedson post lyrics along with Sk'nDeep i was shocked.

Again thanks to both of you

You welcome S&L...Please do us a easy favor, not too much to do. Please..post feed back on our songs...I have about 8 in total. Failedson has a few since he just started..This feeds us..like feul for the fire..And if you don't mind me asking what was this for? Are you in the music industry or somthing?

I recently got into the music industry, nothing too big. Im only 16 so...can be hard
Me and my group wanted to start rapping/singing about subjects that people can relate to. We've made 2 songs so far with 4 under development.

Nd ill be sure to give feedback on your songs, its the least i could do

all right if you make it big before I do remember me. you can make the check out to...J/K good luck.

You're welcome Saybers, actually I've only post one lyric so far -_- but I'll post sup some more when I feel like to.

And if you're into rap, I think Sk'nDeep's would fit the most

Daaamn you guys this combo effort was awesome!! I can't write Rap for **** but I know good stuff when I read it or hear it.
SL you got a double-dose of pure awesomeness on this request 'ey?