quick one, what yall think?

Originally Posted by Jacob Segura

I always do dis sh!t, i said i go hard when i do this sh!t, and im gonna sh!t on yo toilet
I mix ma sh!t up wit ya sh!t and make sum brand new fukcn sh!t like u aint never heard before
call it muddy water flow
spit sum rhymes den i smoke sum dro
my high climbs as i light one mo
makin my mind go fukcn slow
but my mouth must just not kno
my rhymes get sicker now watch me go
too much feces up in my flow
flush da toilet den sh!t sum mo!

I think you're a dink dipping your pen in white ink
You're on the lyrical brink of making me drown myself in my sink
Jesus I can't believe this
All you ****in need is
A gun to your apple with some ******* telling you ta leave this
Should that ******* be me? I'ma leave that to you
Reply to this jewel... and pick a nice wall to be screwed to.
Did I lose you? **** I'm bringing back the old school,
I'm changing the new you cuz I didn't like the old you

So u need sum advice?
Boy u selling half price
Like u rollin da dice and just spitting wat u gettin
***** I flow while I'm shittin
Call it toilet paper lyrics, every turd is hard hittin
And yes you are right I'm numba 1 wit da pun
Piss ma *** off and I'm numba 2 wit da gun
Boom, **** ya brains out, now ya head got da runs
Should I stop there? Naa I'm having to much fun
Call ya self smoothtung
Polished by d!cks ever since u was young
I know I'm kinda sick but I'm also kinda hung
Leave u hockin up cum after I fill up ya lungs
Quit jockin on me boy
I'll break u like a toy
Oops I pulled barbie's head off... Give it to ken and tell him enjoy
I think its time to wrap this up
I done wrecked this pup enough
And this ***** just hit me up, said she wanna do sum "stuff"
Time to pound on sum muff XD

Call it toilet paper lyrics, every turd is hard hittin
<Punch line>

You' some emcees that, really need to improve please
Stop tryin' to be slick' nd' be the real n*qqa that truths be
Told that you really say "F*ck Peace" ?
Calm down, you dont even mean it,
Your from a hood thats soft (True) I've even seen it
How em' people say they qo hard, but really they know
That once ifront in their yard, they say Stop, Dont, No
But, when its your qirl im f*ckin', she qo', No, Dont Stop
She knows, shes bad so then she made that p***y pop
Anyways, f*ck that, those lines that I made up, they' stupid
But you'll start to love em', when I shoot youu like cupid
You say you kill the beat, I f*ckin' assassinate it
With my lyrical power, Im who made you foos that hesitated'
To reply, and know I, am so fly,(Thats basic)
B*tch you dont think I know what im sayin' ? (Ha) Just face it
And tell me that I am one who aint too amazin'
I be rockin' em' Nikes ,n*qqa while im blazin'.


This Sh*t is too whack and out of siqht
I miqht as well qet it a ticket and take it too its fliqht
Too qet rid of it quick, i need a qet away so it can be slick
And lick, like nude dancers', you think you can spit ?
B*tch qet back on that d*ck, I know you think this' is sick.
Dont try to lie to yourself and say this aint even the sh*t, Sh*t !
I qot that mothaf*cka, he didnt know he was hit
Heard mad n*qqas screamin', qun shots, people leavin'
And it was qood, until em' mothaf*ckin' cops seen me'.

But I didnt say its over yet, so dont let me fool ya'
You seen your face ? it looks like you need help from Buddha.
Nah see I think im really wastin' my damn time,
So,actualy its better for me to qo and qet mine'
You nd yo' dumb rhymes, dont make really much sense you see,
So readin' em' is really, really painful to me.
So Ill say ill jump off from this sh*t, about time
(Ha)Some b*tch called me, and said to qo and qive me some
Satisfyin'.

I'm confused wasn't' this meant for feed back?
Or is this a battle thread? You know we have one open right.
Oh well there is always room for more I guess.
Looks like Fun !!!

Who Knows Aha, it is pretty cool tho.

Originally Posted by Jacob Segura

So u need sum advice?
Boy u selling half price
Like u rollin da dice and just spitting wat u gettin
***** I flow while I'm shittin
Call it toilet paper lyrics, every turd is hard hittin
And yes you are right I'm numba 1 wit da pun
Piss ma *** off and I'm numba 2 wit da gun
Boom, **** ya brains out, now ya head got da runs
Should I stop there? Naa I'm having to much fun
Call ya self smoothtung
Polished by d!cks ever since u was young
I know I'm kinda sick but I'm also kinda hung
Leave u hockin up cum after I fill up ya lungs
Quit jockin on me boy
I'll break u like a toy
Oops I pulled barbie's head off... Give it to ken and tell him enjoy
I think its time to wrap this up
I done wrecked this pup enough
And this ***** just hit me up, said she wanna do sum "stuff"
Time to pound on sum muff XD

Kid ur ****ed straight pushin ur luck. "..do some stuff" quit acting tough
Spit **** that rips, make your lines devine.
Blow minds with tight rhymes that talk life...Its fine
Don't be something you're not dog, ur caught dog...I'm top dog
I can paint a better picture with you're words without a smock dog
I'm boss hog and it's time for me to make a presence,
There'll be no pardons so don't ask for forgiveness ****in pessant
You said yourself you're number two with the gun,
Meaning your straight **** with a clip son...try another one
Toliet paper lyrics, I wipe my *** with that ****,
Im complex with wise advise in my scripts its...
Jacob, you're made up... all you're lines are copied
Call me cocky but I got a right, none yet can stop me