why the liars quick to say they f*ckin firespit?
get yo damn smoothtung offa tyler's d*ck
u jumpin in some waters, wit sharks as tight as plyer grips
if life's a *****, rough tongue tops put liar lips right by her hips.
& kiss ***, that's all they know, is kiss ***.
wit ya b*tch ***. I'll snatch ya rhymes back so fast it'll give ya whiplash
u ain't smooth, ya lost in 'thanks'
ya should jus stop & plank.
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Originally Posted by iamskipp
‘fire-spit’ ‘plyer grips’..? avid stuff.. half it’s, but,
You’re out of ‘touch’ much bruv.. con-fine tips like plastic gloves..
You miner spit, I ‘stride strips’ of stiff script.. lactic lungs.
This guy stirred my pride but I Should have his tactics shunned.
You’ll be tragic like a fasting yak-man attacked a Hun.
Im serving GAS (fast) man so fan when at bat or bunt..
Get a plan you’re just ‘yoke’, bloke, a joke.. hatch or stunt.
Laugh’s for fun..
So you’re a joke like a badgered dunce..
And bro, just a joke like adds with Badger runts.
No pros no flows for this bastard. None.
Ive been away but what you posses today I mastered in months..
Im leaving you in awray, plastered kid like after the ‘punch’ -
chris...
Displaced ay? Great - I’m potion still.
If I fell off - I’ll rise with pace, shape, like soda spills..
If you can’t rate my stake, my claim, as made.. your modem’s ill..
And wait, don’t dare equate my fate as fake, my motive’s will.
If dirty came an easy way, I’d reclaim; roll in filth.
I’d ‘force’ Chris a ‘Cheesy’ date, table drape em’ Yoda’s quilt.
He’d try to write harder but I greased ink, broke his quill.
He’s meek links, weak drinks, a dry harbor.. smokeless mill. -
... Originally Posted by smoothtung
Venom's back.. vicious now.. hardened, hated
if 'rise like soda', you'll 'fizzle out' - 'carbon'-dated
first you, then Chris'll bow. the throne? I'll take it
cuz bruv, there's just nohow I'll 'rate' such fake sh!t -
Ay - I've never been very tasteless.. Originally Posted by Venomonology
Smooth tung's groove buds drew thugs like charity bracelets.
I'm a rarity. Face it. Phrase..^ s**t, carbon made it..
'Carbon date' it.. I hate a page of played script - cartman hatred.
I'm fly, so I harvest spaceships - ..and disprove venomonology.
If you find cheese, s**t dude send 'em apologies...
Then i'm *zzzip* like i ripped through another wall or sea,
So i fall asleep..
And constantly, words that fit all-so-clean.. follow me..
Oddly - wallowing an calling me..
I withdraw from sleep enthrawled, that's my policy.
But all I dreamed, I lost in deep sleep, and that's the fall in me.
But what exalts me is what The f**k does 'falling' mean? Honestly..Last edited by smoothtung; 06-17-2012 at 09:09 AM.
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this style of textin stresses me, I've never been the best of cees Originally Posted by smoothtung
developed dreams envelop me til thoughts of grandeur press on me
credentially? I'm well, it seems .. but wonder if it's meant to be
still, vex this V, I'll bury G's for masquerading felonies
what does 'falling' mean? it's energy.
it's life in all it's elements.
it's being thrown and weathering through thick-n-thin for better things
it gives the gift of clever stings to sever all our teatherings
but more than most it's questioning .. 'falling' is necessity
so disprove Venomonology? it's the very thing you always seek
cuz all this sh!t embodies me .. Venomous phenomonologyLast edited by Venomonology; 06-18-2012 at 05:03 AM.
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Ata boy way to step up.
I'll be back on later folks, happy faathas day -
Venomous' yo.. better than most, he knows it's not enough. Originally Posted by Venomonology
he's reaching but seeming leperous though. he's lost the touch.
plus his punches are all padded out ..like a boxer's glove.
I'll help make him better, treating Venom' like a doctor does:
he thinks he's sick.. stronger drugs?
I'll foster trust but cost it up.
"felonies"? ..no.
he 'fell on knees' though.
I'll say he's "falling" but he's actually flawed.
heavy. deep; I "burys Gs" with gravity's force.
I could beat this kid without mentioning anything.
he's dull and I'm sharp so I'll "sever the tetherings".
I'll raise the ante-Venom' like a medicine specialist.
he's under a mask like it's mexican wrestling..
"Vex this V"? ..never.
this is V for Vendetta.
he seems to seek vengeance.
he'll leave and weep Venom'.
he'll be pressured and bleed his weak essence, defeat beckons.
I can't teach effort or elite presence, he'd cease if he's clever.
see.. 'weak' ain't a niche preference, please seek to be better.
I'll get the last laugh like it's a dark night and I'm heath ledger.
he'll read this then keep waking shaking from sleep terrors.
he chats breeze but couldn't even make a leaf tremor.
I'm the ruler and approve of extreme measures.
I tried to check his text but could only see errors.
no debating.
it's verbatim.
the try'll get my verbal verdict..
this is.. 'verses' -versus- 'vermin'.
he changed name from Cheesy' to Venom'.. catch that.
wait.. I make rap tracks.. this is a rat trap. -
You guys are crazy up in here, I hate all of your flows...
Leave it like I'm tar-featherin runnin' and severin'
Don't drop the antidote for the venom in
My system letting' in all of it's brethren
Seep to the floor ooze across smooth
let is go deep into the cracks sink
into every booth. Let it be the best rec-ipe
must have it for living a necess-ity
still giving a good suit too prove you shouldn't have test--ed me.
I'm done here already locked up and fa-ded
Try to remember this moment
You had a cogent with me
All before I was fa-mous and i closed up my--Destiny(ee) -
your dull diction got us yawning, it's boring Originally Posted by _SBU
& when I 'Pulp Fiction', it ain't long til 'Chris Walken'
I'll jaw him. Uppercuts'll leave his cheek bones in fractions
talks 'Paper Planes' like M.I.A ... he's Missing In Action
make 'rap tracks'? this is a wrap'cha running? I'll catch ya
cuz, well... I'm faster - send you to A&E, fractures in plaster
& while you're there you'll recap how you never imagined
that you'd lose this worse than Canibus did to Dizaster
damn, I've really snapped bruv. I'm full blown attacking
you a mod, so if there's 'vermin' here.. we know who the 'rat' is
you'll be glad my 'punches padded' when you on the mat gasping
I asked where your mettle is, you showed me fake plastic
like 'Manning', you past it - perfect target for 'sacking'
cuz you lack the 'Ohhh-lines' - shows you're way outta practice -
Originally Posted by Tyler6270
Ay, ty.. nice, fly. bright try, but I've seen it all.
...like I bought the box set, whole season dawg..
It seems this was a needless squall..
You didnt need to please us at all..
Jesus..
If you packed 'punch' than it was of the tallest misstrewn recipes...
this dude packs punch like caps drawn from 'six .270s'.
And I'm pissed your compelling me when your trials have been highly faded.
You scratch passages while I savagely ravage like stifled raiders.
And still come clean like masses of cracked Lysol containers.
You'll be unseen like a maestro in Vegas..
A kite flown in dangerous conditions,
And I'm quite down to tie down a painless submission..
You're aimless and wishing.
Ill face you and paint in a crimson fist image..
This is txt with a fixed finish.
a mirror couldn't mimic the errors you make.
This; an Imperative state for what's at stake and you fare a fake.
Get on your bares and shake..
I'll never embrace what you write man.
You bite and your type suffer from dragg, sad failures..
You're blind, I'm torched so I had sev's brail burnt.
His wail's are of hurt but I enjoy them Like tap caps to the ale burst.Last edited by smoothtung; 06-21-2012 at 02:35 PM.
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uh.. Originally Posted by smoothtung
..is that a diss rap?
..is it fit to bring impact?
there's a seperate thread meant for peaceful frees', did he miss that?
..all rhyme with no reasoning?
..an insult demeaning this?
is he only set on demonstrating his faults and weaknesses?
..is it even a battle verse?
..to whom that rap concerns,
yo. I got you open like I'm opening a can of worms.
..seems he forgot the basics.
..is he even understanding what the proper aim is?
could he possibly comprehend how to stop and contemplate it?
do you truely believe that your text's pro..?
well..? no..? hah. damn.. let's go..
I know your "potion"s potent and I've noticed it's effects:
..it makes you only focus on flow and ditch the rest.
..it deadens any lessons and lessens any introspect.
..it makes you think you're stronger without giving you a bit of strength.
it makes you overstretch with attempts to be original.
it keeps you low so you'll never reach the pinnacle.
consider 'sewer'side' since your flow's total "filth".
potent "potion still"?
don't kid around.. your style's old and shrivelled now..
it's like life's a b... seems 'e'lix'er' out.
his clumsy text's sayin less than his spilled ink is.
you used to follow Cheesey' around like a mouse. you're still timid.
my raps attack and get your back up..
you collapse and get your backup..
if you made a major contribution here the threat's 'Venomous'.
you write keen rhymeschemes but please keep it relevant.
each time it seems like we've seen high potential
you write some trite lines that lessen the level.
kid.. quit even trying to write diss raps.
you only make sense when you hit 'like' and click 'thanks'.
you don't fit in.. I'm a shark in this fishtank..
so you and your whole 'school' can take 'pane' and 'split that'.
erm. "Yoda's quilt"? ..truely ill yo.
I tend to get head and then 'flee': Chewie's pillow.
I'm known to jet like Boba Fett..
yet spending every episode at war with the clones again.
it seems your schemes are overstretched..
just messed up set ups that lead to no effect.
my rap's classic like the original trilogy.
you're running your mouth like it's lyrical dyssentry.
sick since sucking Venom'..?
just stung, slumped defenseless?
he's 'Smooth', it's true.. his raps lack the traction.
skidding. slipping. the kid isn't a battle rapper.
my bars are darker, it's hardly fair.
I'm sonning you; you'll gasp for 'heir'.
your plot's gone, the 'con's 'former'. a simple conformer..
with some filthy stinking 'flaws' like you're spilling bongwater.
aight.. I won't diss you, I'll issue a challenge..
sit back and practise then match this or quit the rapping.
drop as many hot lines as I did
..or stop writing.Last edited by _SBU; 06-22-2012 at 03:38 PM.
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Yea.. Originally Posted by _SBU
I'll use 'pinnacle' as a starting point like card obsessions.
You 'shake spears' I'm Bacon's fears and should've marked my collections.
Right, I WON'T reach my peak. I'm too large in progressing.
I just never plan to stop this - like im Amish living..
And if you're a man of Pop, dawg, you should call this winning..
You're softly flawed. a pawless kitten or flawkless pigeon.
You'd be barr'd (i promise) for whats written, from a lawless city.
want me to be honest? Than honestly call this whitty
You don't smell bong water your treeless like a plucked hedge.
And I should take your can and 'gut you open' with the rough edge.
Your soft, it'd prolly 'fly' right through you like a ducks breast..
I ball, and you prove your just ball-less like a muffed catch.
My bars are darker - like a censorship. Dawg..
I've got 'smelling eyes' like Nelly Bly, like I sent her ship off.
I've got a hold on your thin bars; like a pencil grip..
So thinking that they'd go very far is just a mental slip.Last edited by smoothtung; 06-23-2012 at 03:16 PM.
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I challenged him to match the lines, attack and thrive as talents rise. Originally Posted by smoothtung
..the man declined.
stance denied..?
he should've cancelled plans to write but didn't quit, he lacks the pride.
..it had to die.
sacrificed..?
I challenged him to match that rap with fifty six dramatic lines..
..lack the time?
or appetite..?
he only dropped a sixteen. barely even managed five mangled rhymes.
leave. abandon site.
please. examine life.
yo.. most folk know they have to try.
..for this kid that's bad advice.
his whole style's old, got it twisted as an ammonite.
he makes major moves but they're all toward rap's demise.
it's gone beyond nas.. nasa "fly": his whole world revolves around mine like a satellite.
my natural shine's showing these germs up like lab design.
he can't suppress the "card obsession".. dealing with his pack of lies.
plus 'shuffling'.. I mean his brand of rhymes seem randomised.
his concepts con 'cept blatent fakes ..change the paradigm.
he copies so I'll bury him with polys' like a parrot died.
he's the bad apple poisoning this paradise..
it aint straight; his snake shaped poise is being pacified.
smoothtung lacks tastebuds but he bitterly resents me.
..deep. I'm gettin' salty like he's dissing 'dead cees'.
but it's no biggie.. 'llow this writer's "wit".
don't call me "dawg", dawg. call me michael vick.
ey, you know my "bars are darker":
black stuff.. jazz clubs.. charlie parker.
this is diverse but it's 'die'verse' when handling rappers.
..his "dark bars" are old as a candle lit tavern's.
coming with nothing but "Pencils" in 'vain'-ya' plainly "Amish".
this is devoutly nihilistic.. 'nothing's sacred.
quite nice
..but you lack culture.
quite "fly"
..for a damn vulture.
he's got the talk but can't act around women.:
he keeps it raw but he "ducks breast", fridge'id.
he lies and I've easily seen better made fables, the renegade failed
..like I'm irony stopping him with severed brake cables.
he lacks this speed but seems he will still crash an' burn
..but he lacks the worth .. and I lack the concern.
word.
type specifically why you're fit to be dissing me ..don't try to riddle me.
seems 'Smooth's losing grip ..cant grasp my abilities.
I'm sleeping on his script, it's 'tired' lyrically.
just stick to hitting 'like' like you quit writing similies.Last edited by _SBU; 06-23-2012 at 04:24 PM.
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Im down to write, you of all people should know that. Yes, I do lack time.. And what I generate in the time I do have I certainly find acceptable. I'll come back with yet another drop, another somewhat respectful response to your ever so melicous criticism. It WILL be shorter than yours I just don't have the time nor the experience to be able to create something of the length and wisdom that you do, in such time.
But yea. Thought you should know what's up. And I hope you do understand that for some people, temptations are too much. I have been dishonest in my life, an addict, and a thief. It's a weakness in my character but I do believe in morals that say that say that honesty is bravery, will is love, and trust is friendship. It's constant wrestle, a personal clash of the titans but I do know my faults and that's important. You can hang on the past, that's your right, but I have apologized and I hope you understand the 'clash of the titans' in everyone. Everyone has the same temptations, some chose to chase them some don't. It doesn't nesseraily make the ones that slip up, bad people. I consider myself a better person than most. You're a great lyricist, but don't judge me Chris -
And I hope you got the Shakespeare sir Francis Bacon reference, not a cheesy line.
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hey Smooth' I was just playing with different angles and personals, not intended as actual criticism and not really trying to tell you how many bars to write. sorry I didn't make that clearer. outside of my battle lyrics I do say that I enjoy your writing and I do hit 'like' on a lot of your posts. you know what's up by now, it's all respect as far as my battle rap's concerned so please don't take lyrical sparring as honest negative feedback.
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No I know man I enjoy the things you say, most all of it is crucial advice, as well as motivation and I know that. I just ask you to understand my side of what happened with the piece from your suit it was a mistake
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All respect though, I know that by now
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yeah Shaad, I remember Chris saying something wayy back along the lines of "I wouldn't respond to or battle someone I didn't respect."
If you see a chance at a personal in this game you gotta take it. It could be the bodybag that wins you the battle. All those guys on GrimeTime, KOTD & Don't Flop REALLY go for it with personal stuff sometimes. But you know it's all hugs and hankshakes once the battle's over.
