Frankie,
Thank you for you sincere reply to my Comment.I appreciate you're sensitive to the feelings of others,but I must protest the fact that you would remove your poems because of "others' morals"!By doing that,you would deprive everybody of this art,just for the benefit of someone that could simply ignore it,or "change the channel"for lack of a better term.Why should I be deprived of this great piece of poetry because it offends someone else!That's what ART is about,sometimes offending ones senses and making them think or rethink their point of view.I would expect you to defend me,so even though YOU WOULD remove it,I respectfully disagree with that course of action.I will always defend the art and the artist over the people that would take away your right to free speech and only THEIR point of view.If first we start censoring our art,how far is it before we are burning books?P.S.I haven't read all your poetry on this Thread yet,so I have only given you feedback on the few I have read!
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I understand your point-of-view, Doug. Artists often feel this way. It can deteriorate into a political discussion sometimes, which I try to avoid. That's because everyone has a different tolerance level for what is art and what is offensive (or even worse, pornography). We merely feel differently on this topic. That's OK!
And you did get to see the last poem; but you won't see the next poem because it's private, and my conscience would be bothered to post it!
This is good discussion, Doug. Thank you for putting forth your views, as I did mine. It may give people from around the world something to think about. Let's not discuss it more on this poetry thread, though.My respects to you . . .
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No,I said my piece!I feel very protective of you and your poetry,and would be very upset to see you remove it FOR ANY REASON other than your own.Nuff said!
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Oooo- Frankiest of Mine!
Admit it, your knowledge of the "english" language at the age of 13 was really baffling me!
"Deviation", "nigrine"....etc.
It may be selfpromotion, as you say, but it shows already at that age your high command of your language, which you have proven in your comments
on various threads as well.
Keep blooming- and *twinkling*!
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Wow, I just found this thread. Amazing works, Frankie
Sometime, I should share some of my poetry as well
I love writing poetry, and I've gotten rather proficient at prose as of lately, as well. Been writing since the beginning of when I first learnt to write!
Edit: Your command of the English language, as many have noted, was really remarkable at the ages at which you wrote the poems... I've always loved using elevated vocabulary, as well (while others haven't responded as enthusiastically to it)... I think it is one of those things that sets apart the "native speakers" apart from the "speakers with masterful command of the language"
Cheers to everyone who is making an effort in any language, either to learn or to speak/write properly!
Minä olen horjunut, epäilen enemmän kuin ennen
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Please do post your poems and/or prose, Dragonfly. I would love to read them. You'll see that recently so many new poets and songwriters have begun posting on ATL!! I am very impressed at the quality--even of those who have English as a second language! I will keep a look out for any poem you post!!! With pleasure...
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Re:The CrimsonFist of "They"
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Hahahha!! You wouldn't be calling me a SHOWOFF if you truly knew how I felt back then!!!
I needed flowers from someone; someone to like my poetry THEN; someone to be nice to me; or someone to call 911 !!!
See post #79, the first half.
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P.S. Enough comments have been made about "Crimson First of 'They'" that this weekend, footnotes are going to be added to that poem and "Bound to Nullity."Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 09-22-2012 at 01:35 AM.
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In that case, I'll add my comment about "The Crimson Fist of 'They'" as well
Fantastic piece, Frankie! It was wonderful to read, and I could feel the emotions you'd put into it. I really liked the flow of it, as well.
Minä olen horjunut, epäilen enemmän kuin ennen
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09-23-2012: FOOTNOTES have been added to "The Crimson Fist of 'They' " (#53) and "Bound to Nullity." (#51)
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[QUOTE=Frankie Jasmine;967838][COLOR="#cc0000"]If anyone is offended by this poem or feels it is inappropriate, I will gladly remove it . . .
Frankie no!maybe i shouldn't suggest that anyone has privilege that everyyone else would not have, but as much as we know you so well, you of all people should not worry about offending people. first of all i know that you would never be frivolous or unfeeling in anything that you would post anywhere in public...and above that i agree with everything that Doug has said, so if you want to read his posts again then you'll know everything else that i have to say as well
Music is what feelings sound like
Listen to the Love
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Alone
. . .
Alone
Storms rage from within
And
From without
I am without
I am
Alone
Frankie Jasmine
09-24-2012Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 09-24-2012 at 11:18 AM.
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Scavengers
. . .
The scavengers
Have arrived
And although I remain
Alive
They peck at my throat
As if to take away my last
Breath
I do not welcome
Death
I have been here before
Old faces at
My door
Knocking as the specters
They are;
Awakening children
In the middle of their
Sleep,
The poor, the weary,
The weak,
Seeking always victims
To fill their outrageous
Guts.
Gluttons, thieves, and plunderers
How can they live with themselves
I wonder
But I know all too well
Frankie Jasmine
09-24-2012
I don’t know if this poem is complete or not. Will decide later…Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 09-25-2012 at 10:11 AM.
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Bitter
. . .
I am bitter
Although not my usual
State
There is no hope in
Hate
No future lies ahead for
Vengeful ones.
Yet I am morphing
Into one.
Maybe it’s not too
Late
To stay the onrush
Of a thousand years of
Feelings
But I am left
Reeling
Unable to catch a clear thought
Incapable of spoken word or
Forceful movement
I nearly relent
But I am not all spent
And I will not give in
To the same sins
Of the others
Who bother me so
Who raid my cupboards,
Strip my house bare
Leave me lying there
Without a shred
Frankie Jasmine
09-24-12Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 09-27-2012 at 05:22 PM.
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Desert
. . .
Once again
I am alone
Full of pain
With no
Healer in sight.
I lie here in the night
Freezing
No will
To cover my bones.
Is this my home?
I’ve been here
Before
Among the things that
Slither in the night
I even ignore my fright
For I haven’t the strength
To move beyond it.
In the day I am scorched
Where is my shelter
Where is my hope
No ropes hold me fast
Yet I cannot move
Any more freely than that.
Must I describe the scene?
You know it.
No sense in exposing gore
Shriveled up from long years
Of wounds left unattended.
No one cared.
It is a desert.
As part of the sand
One of the rocks
Another carcass
Bleached white
In the sun
I am.
Frankie Jasmine
09-24-2012Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 09-25-2012 at 01:10 AM.
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Black Hole - Entry Number One
. . .
Did you hear me cry
As I was swallowed whole
Or was the audio sucked away, too,
So you didn’t know?
Through loudness
I am deafened
Through brightness
I am blinded
I scream but cannot
Make the slightest noise.
Does anyone know
That I am gone?
Will I return home?
Or is it all done . . .
Have I passed the
Event Horizon?
* * *
“Did you hear something?”
‘No, nothing.’
“Just for a second--
Like a yelp--
Quickly come and gone.
I was standing on the lawn
And thought I heard it.”
‘No, not a word.’
“A cry for help??”
‘Oh, please. Your imagination
Gets going then there’s
This contagion like
A conspiracy theory!
You make me weary.’
** Quiet **
“Because you didn’t hear it
Doesn’t mean it’s a moot point.
Perhaps there is a sound
When a tree falls in
The middle of the forest
And no one is there
To hear it.
I can’t bear this!!”
‘Over-reacting, as always.
Go have a strong coffee—
Never mind, make that a
Glass of milk.
Don’t want to hear you
Drivel on more, you
About this bilge
And that which isn’t
Again.
Not pleasant
At all.’
“Perhaps you’re right, dear.
What were you saying
Before?
Oh, yes, we were planning
A trip to the shore.
So nice this time of year,
Don’t you think?”
Not a blink
Of former recognition.
* * *
Black Hole Entry Number One.
Supersonic suction?
Speed-of-light production?
Ha! That's as a mere flitting wake
Behind a quaking little boat
In Galaxies of Ocean!
This is beyond human experience!
Ultra-speed, Numbing sound
All around.
A hopeless plight
When even thinking is
Negated.
Nothing is regulated.
A place
Where everything
Becomes Nothing;
Or so it appears.
Except fear.
Frankie Jasmine
09-24-2012Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 09-26-2012 at 11:56 PM.
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[rKE3FSPJu-4]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rKE3FSPJu-4&feature=related[/video]
(This song used to frighten me to death!)
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Re: Alone
Absolutely Love it.
Note:Frankie,when you post so many,it's difficult to Reply to each piece.I wrote love this etc.about "Alone"but the comment didn't appear under it.Its appearing here!
I'll edit this box,after I read and digest each Poem.
Scavengers:Adore it!IMO complete as is.(First time I've used IMO ever!)
Bitter:Great Rhymes,but............a little bitter!
Desert:Wow,being upset Does bring out the Poet in you!Wonderful Poem,but what's for dessert?
Black Hole:Again,Wow!This could be a short play!All it needs is names for who said what.
You didn't make this easy,but it was well worth it,your new stuff is really good!!!!Last edited by Doug Denslowe; 09-24-2012 at 10:44 PM.
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Understood, Doug. Thank you. Only it doesn't matter--however you wish to do. Each post will show up at the end of the page no matter what (unless, as you say, you re-post each time in the same box).
It's OK. You just need to put the name of the poem and I'll know which you mean; others wlll too.
I appreciate that you read them. Thanks very much.