Haiku

Find for them a nest
Braided twigs, burnt cinnamon,
Chocolate branches

Originally Posted by OrchestraInside

A good, short read for all of us:

http://www.webexhibits.org/poetry/ex..._examples.html

I love. Thanks for sharing.

That dances very nicely, good rhythm. Look - no verbs!

chocolate branches
sugar leaves, mithril stem
roots of amber

Thank you!

Roots of amber
Broken shards of glass
auster shine

auster shine
penetrates the cold
is it you?

3-6-3 senryu:

Is it you?
Darkness shrouds, cold winds blow,
I sense warmth

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EDIT: A sudden shift to blustery cold and light snowfall inspires me . . . or should I say:

Sudden blustery cold
Snow dust on grass, pine needles,
Breath of inspiration

I sense warmth
shadowing my past
waver, doubt

Waver, doubt
Bane of human existence
Sink like stone

Good, but I would opt for an imperative on the last line: Sink like stone. Would that be OK? I would like to start with 'sink', not 'sinks', but it's your poem and up to you

Wonderful idea. Go with it. I will edit. Thanks.

ADD: In a case like this, go ahead with your slight variation without hesitation! If I catch the change or you alert me on your poem, I can alter mine.

sink like stone
rest beneath the waves
watch and learn

Watch and learn
Infants of the Earth
With white hair

OR

Watch and learn
Infants of the Earth
Crowned with white

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P.S. All this practice is making for better poems! Thanks so much for your stimulating game idea. (Please check out my additional haiku 265!)

A sudden shift to blustery cold and light snowfall inspires me . . . or should I say:

Sudden blustery cold
Snow dust on grass, pine needles,
Breath of inspiration

Just how much more penetrating than the prose isn't the poetry!

with white hair
I smile to my heir
eyes in eyes

Eyes in eyes
Endless terrain, vistas
Eternal

eternal
Being breathes and smiles
through my eyes

Please pardon a reckless intrusion into the "train of thought", but this one was inspired on-the-spot by something I just read.

As earth turns
and universe churns
man relearns

Another unintended rhyme?

Hopefully he does.

through my eyes
the soul of the whole
burn new day

burn new day
on this DVD
of my soul

Practicing and sharing can be done at any point, apart from the ongoing game. So allow me...

love me now
silence, my soulmate
I burn again

Did you just
shoot yourself
through my heart?