I didn't mean to offend you or this site, it just annoys me when people pick out stupid things like tyler did, "hyphens an spacing" oh please.. you just wouldn't bother reading it full stop... For a battle board that's a first for me! pick out your fav bars, pick out weak bars, pick up on metaphors, similes , word play, punchlines or just straight reply with a verse ect not nit-picking on hyphens an spacing...does my head in newbie's thinking they know it all..
@ TYLER
A simple sixteen bars? brah i was just savin ya from more battle scars
but you seem mad anxious to make a visit to the E.R
your far to small to even be seen on my radar
you pose zero threat, heard bigger barks from Paris Hiltons pet
So let me put this into form so you can read
"omg the lines are soo close, my eyes startin to bleed"
im a new breed, just iinvincible. Even if your the teacher
betta check yourself son, your talkin to the principle
ATTENTION TO ALL STUDENTS AND STAFF!!!
you made me laugh..but put away all the rif raf
somethin somethin somethin im hot like a oven
your girl calls me her happy meal, i must be Mclovin
im sick cousin, and i cant hear anymore of that whine
or those rhymes..i read em alot loud line for line
all it made me do is pop some more Codine
i figured from the start 16 bars is a waste of my time
all in good fun son
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It's cool Colosso I'll post back in a few when I have a little more time to think. Jd, it bothers me because you can't take the ten seconds out of your time to do this
Here is the first line of this bar
This would be the second so hard to write
You blew this out of proportion gone too far
You ***** and moan now starting a fight
Here is the second four bars of this rhyme
Etc etc etc
It's not hard to do a little spacing so it isn't such an eye-sore to read. Same with the hyphens, they bother me for some reason, like I said that's my opinion. Up to you whether or not you take them out. I just refuse to read anything you post until then, call it what you want. Also, I can stick up for my own battles. go to any other post and look at that. You may be the #1 rhymin beast in the world. But I won't know because I'm not reading something that pauses every 1/3 second in my head because of a ****ing hyphen.
Bars aren’t hard to rap it’s simple as hooked on phonix
Gonna rhyme around you so fast mistook me as sonic
Visit to the E.R will be for the mind I have twisted and contorted
Im the head surgeon your black listed, brain hurts from the semen you snorted
Only eyes that are bleedin are yours from the extreme pressure
The lines could have spaces it just makes it easier to read
The girl you have is sleazy, obviously just a hooker for your seed
You started a war you can’t finish this warning you should heed
It’s codeine and it’s a word that doesn’t rhyme with whine
Rhymes that are so fast and fine they can stop and cease time
You’re the teacher of the special ed kids your all alike
I gave you a chance but you ****ed it up, your out strike
You say I’m nothing a zero threat on your radar
Who you foolin don’t be a hero we all know it’s a gaydar
Your sick from the ill beat that is being produced
Step up take the mic, seeing the beast you just let loose
By the way the line thing was mainly at Jd. I wouldn't mind the no spaces if it weren't for constant hyphens. Lol
I understand the want of spaces, no one wants to read a bunch of words scrunched up like that. Honestly, I didn't read JD's thing either, I try to but its like Tyler says an 'eyesore'. I'm not saying its not good, and neither is Tyler. We're just saying if you would like us to read it, put some spaces. Just a suggestion though. And I don't mind the hyphens, I understand their use.
haha im glad you picked up on the codeine...
but i figured it got the msg across regardless on how its pronounced
I get their use now that it's explained but it just doesn't read right in my head, like I can not do it. All the years of reading in English has changed my mind haha. Thank you for understanding me though Zachre.
yeh i see your point but at the end of the day ever person is different n have their own unique way of writting and structure... if everyone was the same rap would be boring
That is very true. I'm just asking instead of having a big wall of text do something like this
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sdlkfjlas;dfjldsakj
sadflkjsdf;ljasdl;jfk
sadflkjasd;lfjasdl;fjldsf
sdlfkjasl;dfja;lskfjd
asdlfkjasl;dfjsdlf
sad;flkjslf;j
You don't have to have certain bars or anything just spaces to make it an easier read. I mainly had this pointed towards JD Colosso, but I get where you are coming from.
Fair enough i will stop posting on this board isn't worth my time if no one is going to read what i put out, Honestly this is the only site that's complained about how my verses are structured and iv been writing lyrics for over 10 years... never mind, im gone...
JD
I read the lyrics, I like them and I get them. Quite good actuallyI have no problem with the absence of spaces, I write like that sometimes and it don't bother me. Anyway, i'mma reply:
Bars ARE hard to rap or at least to write,
See the shxte you find to fight upon these Walls
But try as I might my rhymes could be crap
'Cos I dunno if I'm hanging low but i'mma throw
What I got unto these rhymes 'cos Now's the time
To show your skill and thrill us with your bars
And hit us hard
Make us give up to close the doors shut
But saying that,
You gotta pull tricks out of the hat
'Cos in fact you need more than that to stay intact
When you battle the best in a contest
So don't protest when being beat
'cos sometimes you have to accept defeat and move on
To move yourself from a loss 'cos i'mma toss you aside
And take your pride as I decide who's the boss
Lol he took it to heart but regardless this is the battle thread and i came here wit a blade..so whos gonna come at me?
You bring a knife to a gun fight mistake one
You take us too light think this is all fun
This is one fight that you cant possibly win
This you are too stupid to comprehend
Get out of my house step down my steps
Startled the beast like i lion I have leapt
See here you rhyme like a kid fool like a clown
This isn't a place to mess around smile to a frown
Atomic bombs droppin movin the earth quite platonic
Fire hot as the sun evil beat once angelic now demonic
Machine gun on auto burst drinkin wanna be rappers like you
Taste so good quenchin my thirst come at you is something I'll do
Knock you down just to help you right back up
Still drinkin breast milk haven't gone on to the sippy cup
Frolic around all happy like your some pippy long stocking
Worlds distorted fallacies thwarted you'll prob run away not shocking.
I bring my dirty words and invert your shxt 'til it hurts
Don't subvert what I assert, me, I was alert from birth
This is one fight I might not even keep in mind, aayt ?
I won't bite, but I know u like me and it's time
U get out of my crib, I dismiss your shxt kid
U ain't runnin' it, bxtch, you know u ain't runnin' shxt
I'm the lioness, so don't u confuse my kindness for blindness
My rhymes are timeless, please do call me your Highness
All this tightness is priceless, plus I'm righteous
While you're mindless and uninspired, go get typhus
Ayo atomic bomb, here I come, ain't that some shxt ?
From the slums of Belgium, 'bout to crumble what u spit
Knock u off ur socks and than rock your block
Hiphop non stop, boy I pop their whole stock
So do me a favor and save yourself the waver
To rap is hard labor and you ain't got the flavor ...
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I'm no rapper, but f-ck it. Here goes nothing.
First off let me start by introducing myself
Wait hold up, f-ck it, you should know me by now
The leader of the New World Order
Just ran across the border with mother f-cking Dora the Explorer
So let me say I've been exploring your rhymes
Me, Boots and Diego have been tearing apart your lines
The ones you left on Whitney Houston's coffee table
Used to pick up chicks in bathroom stalls labelled disabled
That's all you can get man, don't try to front with me
Cause I'll catch you in the act, along with Dateline NBC
I'll disable the best, crack their shoulder blades over their necks
Leave your pride wounded by a noob that doesn't know sh-t
One kids already left the thread, I'll make that sh-t a trend when I spit
You'll try to reply to this sh-t, but I won't hear you with your mouth full of d-ck
This raps a f-ckin joke, seriously kids don't take it to heart
I made a reference to Dora the Explorer, so there you go, rip me apart.
Last edited by LetThatFeverPlay; 12-07-2010 at 02:26 AM.
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i’m murderous, when serving-spitz, my worst versez-give-‘em-faceliftz!!
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