Haiku

end.
all there
is?

Alone
stolen words
go

Is
it me?
crystal laugh

crystal laugh
clear, cold and dead
echoes

Echoes
waterfalls
crash

forced
ignorance
bliss

crash
blasted
life

Life
evergreen
flourish

flourish,
timelessness,
tonight

Tonight
pain relived
fault

I dont feel well. Off this thread for tonight. Cue Frankie

Peace

Interesting poem for an exit, Noor. :l Remember what OI said about chipping away when working from the subconscious? Perhaps your last poem is what's revealed after all that chipping, whether you realized it or not, my little wren. (I happen to like it, because it reads "pain relieved;" then you see it is "relived," and the pain is redoubled.)

Fault
San Andreas
Shake

shake
salt of life
savor

savour,
wailing December,
your last days

Hi guys! It seems all kind of syllable countings are in the offing Thanks! Been reading them for 4 hours since I'm back!

your last days
new spring awaiting nearby
door ajar

Indeed. I think we've generally tried to stick to 3-5-3 and 5-7-5 mainly, but there are some pretty good 1-2-1's and others, we're all experimenting after all. Your 3-8-3 is certainly different, me like

door ajar -
a gleam of something
eternal

thank you,lol is it not 3 7 3?
The next one is 3 5 3:

eternal
moon sailing away
morning dew

Both 'a-wai-ting' and 'ne-ar-by' are 3 syllables, plus 'new' and 'spring' = 8.

morning dew
silence. fields... the sky:
perfect red

Thanks, O.I ! That surprised me: nearby has 3 syllables! Come think of it!
That means 3 8 3 is now joining the haiku race not yet though


perfect red
warm blood spilled on wasted ground
heaven cries

heaven cries
earth trembles with the
shock of birth