Haiku

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

On Evil Soil
I trend and toil
Fill her up and check the Oil

brilliant, Doug! Just out of the blue, brilliant way to make the train go in a different direction again

Originally Posted by amaryn

brilliant, Doug! Just out of the blue, brilliant way to make the train go in a different direction again

Sometimes I get Lucky!

Enter safely
She's tall and shapely
Just in time for Chelsea Lately

Prisoners of frost
caged dryads cry
pale tears

Pale tears
Coupled with long and tattered years
Only reenforces my fears

You're welcome to pick up the thread, Doug, but when I write in italics, I'm not aiming to participate in the game Just posting stuff that goes through my mind in haiku/senryu-form.

I do hope your 'long years' haven't been that 'tattered'...!

prisoners of frost
remnants of eternal glaciers
spring does slumber still

Everyone seems pretty insistent

Originally Posted by OrchestraInside

You're welcome to pick up the thread, Doug, but when I write in italics, I'm not aiming to participate in the game Just posting stuff that goes through my mind in haiku/senryu-form.

I do hope your 'long years' haven't been that 'tattered'...!

This isn't a game to me!!!!LMAO!!

Spring does slumber still
Summer breezes if you will
Winter cold's bitter chill

Originally Posted by VivaPalestina

Everyone seems pretty insistent

Viva, it's demanding, imperative and continuous alright, but it's become a little bit more of a labyrynth,lol

bitter winter
rigid white dreams frozen
lustless limbs sleep

Lustless limbs sleep
All the while,counting sheep
Dreaming of Little Bo Peep

little Bo Peep
shepherd without sheep
never can sleep

Never can sleep
Stars shine in darkness
Shine all day too


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I'm rusty. Granted.

And I do not wish to run off our faithful posters. Please--continue to post. Just a reminder: The art of haiku is "painting pictures with minimal words," not "rhyming with few words." Your brief rhymes are "ditties," which, of course make me smile. But they are not haiku. ("While the cat's away, the mice will play" = a ditty for you!!!)

Anyone still interested in haiku?

If not, maybe one of you clever poets can start a thread to showcase your talents, making people smile with your short rhymes!

Frankie, hi Here I painted a picture of insomnia. The rhyme IMHO is not disturbing in this case. Words used are minimal as well,lol

I'm on a haiku hiatus, though you never know when something pops out. I could use a couple of Noors spurring me on, lol

Originally Posted by OrchestraInside

I'm on a haiku hiatus, though you never know when something pops out. I could use a couple of Noors spurring me on, lol

Ola, Ola, it's always bad to become too dependent on other peoples' inspiration

Not a single book or piece of art I love was made without it, amaryn.

Admittedly, nearly all of those authors and artists were chaotic and so were their lives, but... A good soul is like a mango-passion fruit-orange smoothie with ice made of fresh produce in a tropical country, and you have two options - to drink slowly, or keep ordering more (I'll happily admit to being extremely partial to fresh smoothies of said description freshly made to order in Thailand )

Thailand being one of my favourite countries when it comes to food...... I humbly bow....