Haiku

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Originally Posted by OrchestraInside

There is a myriad of possibilities... 'Overcome me, dark', 'Darkness upon us' - remember, often you don't need to use a verb at all, which is rather particular for haikus, and opens up many possibilities.

Oooooo! I love, 'Overcome me, dark'!! That's "me." Thank you very much. I also need to practice thinking outside the box.

I will remember that verbs are not necessary in haiku. Now I'll be practicing on both of these points. Thank you for the advice.

The senryu would then read:

Whispers in the light
Signal intimate moves when
Overcome me, dark

Originally Posted by Frankie Jasmine

Wow! Beautiful, Noor!

I can never get enough compliments Thank you dear

Sorry, I saw Ola's one first so carried it on - I also didnt like my first poem so spent a while editing the second line

I'm going to go crazy with alliteration on this one

wispy windswept stalks
sway in silent rhapsody
represent the meek

Race against time now that we're three It's all yours Frankie

Represent the meek
Who cry out not for pity
With enduring strength

With enduring strength
howl the hurricanes in us
deep inside

Deep inside
shadows flickering
gnarled trunks

Urgh I'm going to start spelling centre all wrong because of this forum

If you go advanced, no need to spell it at all. Too many clicks for your taste?
I'm feeling short tonight.

Gnarled trunks
by the shore
wild

I'm as lazy as they come. I love short.

Wild
Your eyes
Gone

Gone.
Was it
ever?

(Feel free to drop the question mark!)

Does punctuation carry on?

Ever?
She felt
hope

Let's agree to drop punctuation if we want to.

hope
smiled
alone

Alone,
silver
listens

What I really wanted to say was about a silent silver sphere hanging in orbit seeing and hearing everything, a quiet observer, but the syllable count just ever so slightly impeded me.

Don't let it; you could have said

alone
silver sphere
listens

listens
hearing not
a thing

A thing
of such might:
Your smile

your smile
with me
now

Your smile
Caresses soul, fondles heart
Every time

Too slow again . . .