Originally Posted by
MoonRide42
Ahoj Hugo. I think this seems to the smoothest lyrics of yours that I've read yet. And I'll give a hand on what Sk'nDeep mentioned, 2 or 3 things that could make this perfect in my opinion:
Straight ahead afore
Though heat or through the roar*
To make my dreams come true
Donīt care for a discouraged voice (or discouraging voice)
Of people living their grey lives
I feel this is the right choice
To know Iīm alive
"I've to be" ..... do you mean the British way of contracting "I have"? ... in honesty I think it would sound in song if you say "I'm to be" or just say "I have to be" without making it a contraction.
This is great, would love to hear it set to music!