Dreams (never satisfied)

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  1. Hugo Zhor said:

    Default Dreams (never satisfied)

    Always when my dream comes true
    Already have another one
    A setting goal of something new
    I have never done

    Bridge:
    First of all it seems
    That all of my dreams
    Are so far away

    All I have to give
    To make my dreams live
    It is worth to pay

    When resolution is made
    I have to keep on holding tight
    To my own goal not to fade
    Fullfillment skyline

    Bridge:
    First of all it seems
    That all of my dreams
    Are so far away

    All I have to give
    To make my dreams live
    It is worth to pay

    Chorus:
    Higher and higher
    Through ice or through fire
    To make my dreams come true

    Straight ahead afore
    Through heat or through the roar
    To make my dreams come true

    Donīt care for a discouraged voice
    Of people living their grey lives
    I feel this is the right choice
    To know Iīm alive

    Bridge:
    First of all it seems
    That all of my dreams
    Are so far away

    All I have to give
    To make my dreams live
    It is worth to pay

    Chorus 2:
    Down below and deep
    Running upright or creep
    To make my dreams come alive

    Not rot to the core
    Thatīs always do I for
    Never satisfied

    Iīm to be
    ītill the end of time
    Never satisfied
    Iīm to be
    ītill eternity
    Never satisfied
    Last edited by Hugo Zhor; 06-07-2011 at 10:41 AM. Reason: changes
     
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    SK'nDeep said:

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    This is a inspiring piece of work. I like the never say die mentality. I did see some area's for improvment. a few lines here and there seemed to be missing words.
    good start for what has potential to be a awsome song.
    Peace Love Empathy

    Sk'nDeep
     
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    MoonRide*r* said:

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    Ahoj Hugo. I think this seems to the smoothest lyrics of yours that I've read yet. And I'll give a hand on what Sk'nDeep mentioned, 2 or 3 things that could make this perfect in my opinion:

    Straight ahead afore
    Though heat or through the roar*
    To make my dreams come true

    Donīt care for a discouraged voice (or discouraging voice)
    Of people living their grey lives
    I feel this is the right choice
    To know Iīm alive

    "I've to be" ..... do you mean the British way of contracting "I have"? ... in honesty I think it would sound in song if you say "I'm to be" or just say "I have to be" without making it a contraction.

    This is great, would love to hear it set to music!
    There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
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  4. Hugo Zhor said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by SK'nDeep View Post
    This is a inspiring piece of work. I like the never say die mentality. I did see some area's for improvment. a few lines here and there seemed to be missing words.
    good start for what has potential to be a awsome song.
    Thank you for your comment.
    About missing words, there is different melody so rhyming verses arenīt the same long.
     
  5. Hugo Zhor said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by MoonRide42 View Post
    Ahoj Hugo. I think this seems to the smoothest lyrics of yours that I've read yet. And I'll give a hand on what Sk'nDeep mentioned, 2 or 3 things that could make this perfect in my opinion:

    Straight ahead afore
    Though heat or through the roar*
    To make my dreams come true

    Donīt care for a discouraged voice (or discouraging voice)
    Of people living their grey lives
    I feel this is the right choice
    To know Iīm alive

    "I've to be" ..... do you mean the British way of contracting "I have"? ... in honesty I think it would sound in song if you say "I'm to be" or just say "I have to be" without making it a contraction.

    This is great, would love to hear it set to music!
    Ahoj Moonride

    thank you for your great suggestions and nice english lesson