Originally Posted by
Jfam
After further editing i now have a hopefully finished set of verses so see what you think. Also, any chorus ideas would be good - a sung one, not a rapped one though 'cos i really don't feel any choruses i have tried to write for this aren't any good. Be critical if you review please, any slight errors found are things i can fix and not repeat over and over!
(verse 1)
I wake up from a night of constantly dreaming
A break up of the emotions i'm really feeling
Bouncing off my explosions of further hating
Stating the life I would rather be leading
'Cos i wake up to a world that just stays the same
Into a situation i know will never change
And mortgage repayments I continually rearrange
Credit Card overdrafts so large I'll leave the recession amazed
I need a loophole i haven't already exhausted
One of those tv ads that say they can solve it
To stop my life continually revolving
I'll need exceptional skills in real life problem solving
Pity my maths has never been that good
I never tried hard to achieve the best i could
But now i move on like everyone knew i should
I trot off into the sunset, i set off on foot...
(verse 2)
I feel relief, as i reach the station
And buy a train to obtain a destination
To give myself a place to aim
And a target for the cars, cash and fame, to remove my pain,
And to begin I start off on my way today
My aim to sing to hundreds on a bigger stage
And i won't let nobody get in my way
Or step off long enough to let others amaze,
And today i begin the task to overtake
A hundred others I compete with in this race
Past the array of future Eminems to take
My place in the charts so people recognise my face,
At last the train pulls away i'm thinking
About the memories of my past and endless drinking
And I know then i've made the right decision
By embarking into the sunset to follow my vision...
(verse 3)
As I ponder over the events of today
I think about how my life could be as the trees go rushing past my face
I state the ways i'd take
If the grand plan blew over or fell out of place,
Back then I couldn't see the future or further state
The backbone of my life laid out on a plate
A mixture of the things I could further create
Or whether the dream would arrive early or late,
And as the train slows down the doubts begin to fade
My brain lights up to the gain so long delayed
The vision that for such a while I had prayed
Had come true on this heavenly mid-summers day,
And if i ever wanted to return to my old endangered place
I'd hope fame had not affected the way i behave
And not even a trace
Of my past life upon my ever changing face...