Hi everyone
I just wrote this last night, and I like it quite a bit, but I would love to get you guys opinions on it.
It's about a girl, which I loved, and told her that, but she turn my offer down, and a week later, my friend who dumped his girlfriend 1 day after he had met the girl I loved, my best friend and the girl I loved were together...
That really hurted me, and this is about my troubles, and the many many nights I've been awake, thinking about it, and the times I had nightmares about it, and just genererally how it made me feel...
Hope to hear honest feedback
(BTW, It's not finished yet)
Little Swing, Broke My Wing
Such a little swing
I broke my flying wing
No one seems to see
How it's hurting me
Im am sick of screams
Help me! Stop my dreams
Keep me from that place
Where there's a fading face
So much else to say
But every word is gray
Think I'll make a stop
My local "color shop"
My every single word
Goes away unheard
Non of this was planned
Help me to whitstand