More recent rap (EDITED VERSION)

I've edited the existing version. Any feedback will be appreciated

VERSE 1:

Girl you got more issues than you got shoes,
Tryna make me understand but im just getting more confused,
Lookin through my texts, I can tell your vexed,
But then realisin your wrong and breaking down the very next.

At first I thought it was cute but now its getting out of hand,
I came home late so you think I’ve had a one night stand,
I just cant come to terms, why you don’t seem to learn
That that type of stuff just makes us both burn,

And as soon as I get home, I know the drama that gonna unfold,
its 2.30 in the morning and now u’ve showed,
Been callin you for ages why you got your fone on hold?
Are you seein someone else? Is there something I need to be told?

And Im like huh? What kinda assumptions are those?
Im sorry that the food you had cooked for me turned cold,
But that don’t mean that my love for you has grown old.

VERSE 2:

Tryna constantly find out where Im goin, where Im at,
Knowin Im gonna come back but still keepin me strapped,
Your demands are too extreme girl I just cant adapt,
And one day my patience might just snap,

And then you will look back and regret,
What might have been if you hadn’t tripped at every single step,
cause your assumptions are getting too far fetched,
Got me starting to feel I should already have left

And now you think your on to something,
Just cause you saw a girl wearing some ring,
But I aint done nothing wrong
So why you asking me to come clean,

See I love you more than a kid love tooty fruity,
Sweeter than anything u’d see in the movies,
The only 1 of my mind and the one who’s dearest to me,
Yet it makes me mad u think im wiv her who’s she?

Obviously, you got nice stories to tell, and I enjoyed reading it. However, I wanna hear you spit this on a beat, because I don't think it flows. Some parts will flow, but not all of it. When you use longer sentences, you have to make sure that multiple words rhyme, otherwise it is going to break your flow. It's a nice lyric though, I think u could turn this into a real good rap if u edit some parts.

Hey thanks for the honest feedback. Yeah I tend to rap in my head but dont really have a beat in mind so I do tend to struggle with the flow. I think I shud cut the last 2 lines of the first verse as well when I read it again they do seem out of place. Hope you liked the content and the rhyme sequence overall tho.

I like the content a lot, that's why I took the time to post a comment. You just need to play with your words more and you'll get there.

Definatly listen to Molotova she knows wats good, I can tell you know what you want the flow to sound like but you kinda chop it up a lil but is still good yph.

i agree with molotova about your story tellin your like biggie smalls and earl hayes but i think you should work on ur chorus