Rihanna/Eminem clone (more or less)

This was inspired (for want of a better word) by "I Love the Way You Lie" but it needs some help to get there. When I started writing the verses I thought I had a lock on the tune (or tone) and beat, but I lost it somewhere and couldn't get it back. And I gave up trying.

So don't expect the verses to match the template's verses/measures exactly. My chorus works okay for the part that Rihanna sings, but it does not work for the verses.

Also FYI, I wrote this as a solo, not a duet.

The big conflict, Love/Hate: For anyone who's been there I think (hope) it'll work, but if not, then maybe not...


Still-don't-know-what-to-name-this ...

Chorus:
Maybe you'll wonder
why I'm still cryin
But that's alright baby
I'll be fine
Do you wonder
why it still hurts?
Well I still dream
You'll always be my girl
You'll always be my girl

When it first came down
You didn't know I meant for good
So all the way to the end
You just never understood
Why I'd get so damn upset
Every time you turned your head
Yeah you always told me
That you'd always wanna hold me
But you couldn't hold your line
For even two weeks at a time
There was always something new
Maybe even some old glue
Every time you'd wanta roll
You'd just leave me in the cold
And it got so f**kin old
I wouldnt take it, had to fold...

Maybe you'll wonder
why I'm still cryin
But that's alright baby
I'll be fine
Do you wonder
why it still hurts?
Well just because
You'll always be my girl
You'll always be my girl
You'll always be my girl

I knew we didn't have forever
but baby why couldn't you ever
Just give us the little time
You kept sayin we'd have together
In peace? Why was it so hard
For you to just play the cards
we had right in front of us?
'Steada stirrin up some dust
Makin crazy girly fuss
Throw me under the bus
Just so you could have a day
Don't you know you had to pay?
In the end I threw some hate
That you didn't anticipate??
But you just shoulda known
I was gonna bring it home...

Maybe you'll wonder
why I'm still cryin
But that's alright baby
I'll be fine
Do you wonder
why it still hurts?
There's just nobody else...
You'll always be my girl
You'll always be my girl
You'll always be my girl

It was more than I could take
When you made it ALL look fake
Tossed me in the f**kin lake
Licked the icing off the cake
For yourself. So I was left
Hangin off the f**kin cliff
Baby all the f**k alone
While you chased another bone
Yeah I'm still mad as hell
Coz you didn't know how to tell
the simple truth a single time
even that woulda made it fine
but you couldn't get past the hidin
so you totally f**ked my mind
I said I wouldn't break the rules
But I won't play nobody's fool...

Maybe you'll wonder
why I'm still cryin
But that's alright baby
I'll be fine
Do you wonder
why it still hurts?
There's just nobody else...
You'll always be my girl
You'll always be my girl
You'll always be my girl

But I caught you skippin school
Coz you couldn't keep it cool
Now you say nothin lasts forever
Just some words to toss your tether
Wonderin will you ever learn
All it takes to make it turn
Is to give it what you get
It won't bring you no regret
If you can keep it all in step
When the hand is worth the bet
Well you made your f**kin bed
But you kept stayin in my head
But now I open up my eyes
All I can see is freakin red
I won't play nobody's fool
Ain't no more f**kin rules...

Maybe you'll wonder
why I'm still cryin
But that's alright baby
I'll be fine
Do you wonder
why it still hurts?
Just nobody else.....
You'll always be my girl
You'll always be my girl
You'll always be my girl

ummm... maybe you can name this "You'll always be my girl" :P sorry got no other name to suggest xD...
btw this lyrics is also good

Good lyrics Moon. Deep song. Great message to relate to. No matter how bad it got. you always loved her. I lost flow in a couple parts trying to read it to the way you lie. Or maybee that song is just programed in my head like most of his other songs. the second to the last verse was the strongest in my opinion.
good job Moon.
What about,

(Unconditionally yours) Or (Unconditional Love) or somthing like that, may be a refrence off and event that could happen that's unconditional. like a habit that allways comes back to you. or somthing like that.


Hope this helps. man.

Thanks both of you, for knocking the dust off of this one and for the suggestions. Sk'nDeep, I think I even like just "Unconditional" all by its lonesome self.

I'm certainly not a rapper, but the thing about that song by Eminem is the sheer power of it. no matter whether people like Eminem or not, I think the song is epic rap in every sense of the word, especially with Rihanna's added dimension. And one day it pushed me so hard that I had to try to express myself in the same tone. But of course mine's not even close, and I don't really like to copy ither artists anyway. But, imitation is the sincerest form of flattery?

Thanks again guys! All the best.

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