Ok, so this is a new rap I've made. I wrote it with a happy, kinda high energy dance type beat in my head. Verses are rapped, hook is more talked than rapped I feel, and verse three is sung at the moment but I don't think I can sing so I will be forging a rap for that part soon anyway, I'd like some feedback for this please
Moving on
(Verse 1)
Climbing over mountain top
Wonder when it will all stop
Like you just got out of school
'cos you know what you want to do
Gotta keep on moving through
Time hold from losing too
Much to stop the growing flow
'cos you know where you gotta go
Avoid all the troubled times
Destroyed all of Hitlers mines
Battles with your endless rhymes
And training with the greatest minds
Beating up the bullies mates
Sending them to hellish gates
Getting up on random spates
Of chilling out and better dates
(Hook)
Inspiration and reparation
Liberation as we're moving on
Preparation and separation
The elation as we're moving on
Take it out and let's rearrange it
You know you got to so don't go away
Get going on and make sure you do it
Take your time but have no delay
(Verse 2)
Contemplate the greatest date
Living with your bestest mate
Trying hard and working good
While living like you knew you should
Buying stuff and keeping cool
Diving in your swimming pool
Bathing in your newest suit
And wallow in your greatest fruit
Take the money, give it out
Ride a bike and have a shout
Have a laugh or have a bath
And buy the swag Armani scarf
Holiday or go to work
Abu Dhabi, maybe Perth
You know what you want to do
So move it on and see it through
(Hook)
Inspiration and reparation
Liberation as we're moving on
Preparation and separation
The elation as we're moving on
Take it out and let's rearrange it
You know you got to so don't go away
Get going on and make sure you do it
Take your time but have no delay
(Verse 3) - Sung would better but rapped at the moment
Grab a new shiny top
Grab one for you
Take me to the next stop
Take me on through
I beat the greatest foe
I'll ever know
I went to all new heights
More than was right, all for you
(Hook)
Inspiration and reparation
Liberation as we're moving on
Preparation and separation
The elation as we're moving on
Take it out and let's rearrange it
You know you got to so don't go away
Get going on and make sure you do it
Take your time but have no delay
(Outro)
Heal your hurt, and heal all your mind
Take your time and see what you find
Give it a go, and give it a show
Give it your all and see what you know
Heal your hurt, and heal all your mind
Take your time and see what you find
Give it a go, and give it a show
Give it your all and see what you know