i want you

You let me do the things i like
Not worrying about me all night
all ways being by my side
Making me feel alright
Oh
Just someone to talk to,
Never having to argue....
and you know that i love you
But i dont know what to do.

I stay up thinking of you all night
but i have a girl and thats not right
but you put up one hell of a fight
But i dont know how much i cant take it
I know baby you care
But this just aint fair
You say you will all ways be here
but breaking your hearts my bigest fear.

I want you to be mine,
you know ill treat you good,
Ill treat you better then anyman would
Because if you were mine,
you would make me shine,
Like im your shining star,
ill show you who you are

Nice roll in these lyrics, really easy to follow. I only had a small problem with one line:

But i dont know how much i cant take it

Did you mean to flow from like one sentence into another? I can see that possibility, and if that's the case then I would say it's kinda slick
But on the other hand maybe you just meant to say "But I don't know how much I can take"?

Anyway, nice work, I like it.

Originally Posted by MoonRide42

Nice roll in these lyrics, really easy to follow. I only had a small problem with one line: But i dont know how much i cant take it Did you mean to flow from like one sentence into another? I can see that possibility, and if that's the case then I would say it's kinda slick But on the other hand maybe you just meant to say "But I don't know how much I can take"? Anyway, nice work, I like it.

I had this song in my head so i hurried up and posted it so i wouldnt forget it... im not finished. thanks alot tho

Its really good so far...could you review mine?
http://www.allthelyrics.com/forum/ly...h-regrets.html

thanks