Ice Hall

Snow falls all around me,
Driving past our slow beats.
Coldness creeps into these seats
and silences the heat within these sheets.

Nowhere calls that wait for me.
Waking never days it seems.
Sapphire eyes with crimson see
an infinite ice hall symphony.

Running on ice to find you
Slipping along the way.
Running to believe in love again.
Running to stay in place.

It's still cold as you hold me.
Unsure of life and fate.
I'd do anything to light that fire again, baby
Like we used to be.

Nowhere calls that wait for me.
Waking never days it seems.
This reaccuring dream of reality
of ice and of music cover me.

Running on ice to find you
Slipping along the way.
Running to believe in love again.
Running to stay in place.

Why can't we work this out darling?
Our home is right here.
You won't fall through the cracks darling,
Stay right here
Stay right here
With me.

I ran on ice to find you
I ran into your arms
I ran to believe in love again
I ran to find my place

With you

Wow this is great!! Have you posted anything else here? I'd be really curious to read more.

Lol that was actually my task right now...ill be uploading 2 more tonight

I love feedback so any helpful critiques are welcomed

Well in my critiques I usually look at the message more than the mechanics, but I think you write really well too. There are lots of little phrases that I love in this one, and mostly the way your words pull back and forth between dream and reality, or futility, something-but-nothing, a perpetual limbo, like "running to stay in place" and "waking never days". All in all I really enjoy reading your stuff, so please keep it coming

I'm glad you noticed the limbo...the opposites within the verses. It really describes the song as well as holds its lyrics. I really wanted it to have that feel that things are always back and forth in this mini wold. the musical composition to this song is the same. The notes go back and forth repeating.

You have a composition for this already? Is it anywhere that it can be viewed? I loved this very much so, I would like to know how the music would go along with it.

Me too, especially if the music suits the pattern of the lyrics, I think it would be a very interesting song.

lol ill just have to make a video of me playing it. I have several peices of the puzzle finished...but i cant play them all at once yet. I have to wait for my old school to reopen after the holidays before you guys can hear that :P. But ill have something for u guys posted on youtube in the next few days if thats acceptable.

ok so the audios a little off on this -.- not my fault.

I find it works ok if u just close your eyes and listen.
but here it is. its link only just because i dont want to release it fully yet.

heres the link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DAdtdDkZRXo

I am an enormous fan of classical and am in love with the piano. Naturally, I loved it far more than I believed I would. You have a beautiful voice as well. When did you learn how to play? You have a song for sure and I want to hear the finished product once all the touches are put to it. Excellent indeed. Domo arigato, tomodachi!

lol thanks Nanashi Although i did that early this morning before i went to work so my voice is actually much nicer then that ^_^''

I taught myself to play in grade 9...but i didn't really start with it until grade 11...so really just 2 and a half years.