Days And Names And Faces

Days and Names and Faces

And we’ll let this darkness live our lives, with both courage and desire,
Not inside the looking glass, with trembling lips and hearts on fire,
And I know exactly what you’re thinking,
Because I’m tagged in your last post,
And although the message’s private,
How can you not invite the host?

Chorus

And then you’ll say sorry first, and its uncanny coz you mean it,
And you’ll convince yourself we’re cursed,
And I’ll disagree because I’ve seen it,
And we’ll lie in bed together, with smiles of sadness and tears of joy,
And even when a million miles away, I think you know that I’m your boy.
And we’re unsure who’s to blame, but yet unsure how to question,
But every day we let it linger, just simply adds to hearts recession.
And we’ll both pick up the phone, but leave the numbers on the screen,
And just that simple little touch, displays something we could’ve been!

Chorus

Kiss my lips, hold my hand, come on let’s run and make a break,
The porcelain of your fair skin reflected true across the lake,
Then hold me close… (hold me close)(echoes)
And let me breathe away this pain,
Because It’s only days and names and faces,
Till you’ll be mine once again,


And the snow sets in to every corner of my beating heart,
And I’ve lost all the sunshine in my life,
The dreams and hopes of kids and wife,
I couldn’t contemplate us ever being apart,
But I’ll trudge on, as this snow sets into ice,
And what is love,
And why is it such a price?
And when I see you with a new guy,
This air grows so much colder,
And these tears jus freeze in mid-air
As his hand’s still round your shoulder,
And I wish you all the best,
At least you’re happy like you should be,
But I don’t want to face the rest,
My mind will always play what could be,
So I’ll keep on walking by,
Thinking its just a matter of time till when,
I’ll free my mind, won’t look behind,
And I can see the sunshine once again

Chorus

Comments and Ratings would be very much appreciated! Thanks!

© Copyright of Nicholas Williams

I posted this by mistake without re-arranging, The "Chorus" is actually the 5 lines beginning with "Kiss my lips and hold my hand" and it should fit in after every verse rather than the mess ive posted it as...

I can see then, that this is a wonderful work. You should be proud of it. Why the name for the title?
If I must rate this, I would say...8.9 or 9.0. That would depend on the composition to the song. If it is a slow song, then are each line meant to be long? This is the first time I have been asked to analyze so, bear with me.

You know you can edit it however you want? Cut-and-paste entire verses or whatever.

I'l say first that I wish I had written this myself and I think it's excellent. I'm not sure what kind of guide there is (if any) for a Rating system, so I'll give it a 9. This is definitely the best that I've seen you post here. Keep it up, maybe you're a lyrical genius in the making

Actually, do not count my rating. You can, if you wish, but I do not like to. I can never give anyone a terrible score as it is from their mind and heart. How can that be criticized, if only it were offensive? I will enjoy anyone's work, no matter how bad they believe it to be. Have a lovely Christmas and New Year.