Those in Need of Lyrical Reviews

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    greenpanda8868 said:

    Thumbs up Those in Need of Lyrical Reviews

    I wish to help people get correct lyrical reviews about the song they wrote...
     
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    greenpanda8868 said:

    Red face

    (Chorus)
    He broke my heart,
    Stole my pride,
    Left me there,
    There to die.
    No fair-well,
    Letís be friends.
    And who ever thought,
    That this could be the end.
    And who ever knew,
    That two words could hurt this much,
    This much, but Iím holding on.

    When he looks at me,
    Would he ever see,
    How bad he hurt me.
    The walking, good,
    The talking, bad,
    I never knew,
    He was this sad.

    How we argued, when we ever talked,
    He ended it with a last walk.
    We were working it out, so well,
    But that look in his eye made me tell.
    (Chorus)

    All I say, is Iím sorry,
    But baby.
    I loved you.
    You ripped my heart,
    Didnít put it back,
    Left it there,
    Thatís a fact.
    Iím doing to you,
    What you did to me,
    Walking away,
    Donít you see.

    (Chorus)

    Thereís a boy here,
    Telling me he loves me.
    Iím going with him,
    Not missing you, baby.

    When he looks at me,
    I see his heart,
    Not at all ever tart.
    His eyes shining brighter,
    Than yours.
    His voice so pure,
    Unlike yours, to endure.
    He has the light,
    That shines so bright,
    Giving me truth, love, and kindness.

    He fixed my heart,
    Gave me pride.
    Stands right there,
    ĎTill we die.
    No fair-well,
    Not a peep,
    Now Iím ready,
    for the next leap.

    But you,
    Broke my heart,
    Stole my pride,
    Left me there,
    There to die.
    No fair-well,
    Letís be friends.
    And who ever thought,
    That this could be the end.
    End.
    End.
    End.

    Baby I loved you,
    But when you left me standing there.
    Rip in my heart,
    A giant tear,
    Formed along,
    We donít deserve the fate we got,
    But this is, this is the end of my song.



    My inspiration came from experience with friends, but in a deeper relationship point of view. PS I'm having a hard time deciding a name for the song, please help, Hope you liked it... :)
     
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    Eams said:

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    'My Heart' was all i can plunderfor a name :P