Another rap lyric of mine which I'm feeling really good about at the moment which is basically me combining together many things I've learned over the past couple of months to create what I feel is one of my best raps to date. I'm wondering if you'll agree? This is at about 125-140 tempo I'd guess and many bars just flow onto the next one with a small pause or none at all. Any feedback please 'cos I'd actually like to have some on this one 'cos I'm really feeling it, unlike 2 or 3 of my previous raps which have had 0 comments or just comments from me bumping it up. Anyway, here it is:
A Dream
(Hook)
It's just a dream, what do you mean?
'cos sometimes dreams come true like you seen
On the TV, or on a CD
Or in a film with the magic all from a genie
But you're like: yeah, it's one in a million
Can't have luck, you're one in the billions
Who never give up, but always the doors shut
And got no fame as none ever shown up
(Verse 1)
All fame, that's what we hope for
In a world where we're all searching celebs up
But we all know we're never gonna get more
When we're near the doors are gonna close shut
Or we crash and burn before we get a close up
Smash, crash, poor, celebs they turn a nose up
What's in store? Mundane, the crappy shows up
We want more, the pay before it froze up
So we all want to have all the ball
The fun times call and shop at a stall
With flash big cash, living the high life
'cos hey sure, you know, the good is going well nice
And we all know we never gonna think twice
About what's up and clothing with a high price
'cos we all have the crazy, the dream
That big plan, the dreaming, the*scheme
(Hook)
It's just a dream, what do you mean?
'cos sometimes dreams come true like you seen
On the TV, or on a CD
Or in a film with the magic all from a genie
But you're like: yeah, it's one in a million
Can't have luck, you're one in the billions
Who never give up, but always the doors shut
And got no fame as none ever shown*up
(Verse 2)
Work hard, that's how you get by
Not in the cloud, your head up in the blue sky
You keep on, don't get unless you do try
Have no fear, keep dreaming - it'll be mine
But once you're there you work to keep the good place
Smash, bash, grind to stay within the good space
Then move on but stay along a good pace
Why race on? You got the time for good waste
Take on the dream, take on the scheme
Then crack on to where you could'a been
'cos this is the thing that you had always seen
This is it, the bigger self-esteem
Let's crack on, no time for little short breaks
You'll have long, if time for all the big steaks
Go take the beauty, that of which a dream makes
Just make sure, no chance for other re-takes
(Hook)
It's just a dream, what do you mean?
'cos sometimes dreams come true like you seen
On the TV, or on a CD
Or in a film with the magic all from a genie
But you're like: yeah, it's one in a million
Can't have luck, you're one in the billions
Who never give up, but always the doors shut
And got no fame as none ever shown up
(Verse 3)
Let's go wrap up the story of a dream time
Where all goes well, the story of a clean rhyme
No mistakes, so all of what you seen fine
Land of nod, the sleep for which it's been mine
'cos a place like that's become hard to see
And near no chance of that to ever be
So you know here we all would need a genie
Have no fear, the chance becoming weeny
Stay, ... life - just let it go by
We can dream of time within it goes high
Heads up now, we know it never be mine
What's up now, a dream - just let it go by
'cos what we get for stuff we always try
Is nothing here, the dreaming in your head lie
Flat, ... with nothing to show for
A life and gone, we never getting no more
(Hook)
It's just a dream, what do you mean?
'cos sometimes dreams come true like you seen
On the TV, or on a CD
Or in a film with the magic all from a genie
But you're like: yeah, it's one in a million
Can't have luck, you're one in the billions
Who never give up, but always the doors shut
And got no fame as none ever shown up