My Setting Sun

My Setting Sun

Verse 1
Sometimes I wake up
And I feel so worthless
Don’t know what to do
With this miserable life
This life of mine
Sometimes I go to sleep
Cry my soul out
Need to feel the pain

Chorus
Emotional wreckage
On the shore of my life
The sun sets
Across a bloody sky
Torn in my soul
Ripped in my heart
Why did you love me
Just to tear me apart
So hard to trust
I feel that I must
Trust in someone
Trust in anyone
While watching
My setting sun

Verse 2
Now there’s someone new
But every time she promises
I think of your lies
I go to bed
Just to wake up in the morning
Make it through one more day
What if next time
I cannot make it

These are all quite good, but you might consider changing up the structure of them... Instead of a lot of really short lines, you might try some long lines, just to change it up and add variety so you don't bore people who might be reading them. But still, keep it up!

thanks. I have some songs with some different structure, I just don't feel like posting them now. maybe later.

More verses, dear. I would enjoy hearing more of this. Is this complete?

I agree u should try to make it longer.

I'm not done with it quite yet, I'm still writing the 3rd verse...

Sounds good so far but I do agree on the structure change