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Hey people. Been away for a long time and only started writing again just over a week ago so still abit rusty.Got quite a few 16s but I aint been able to write anything full fledged as yet. Please rate

She aint perfect she abit of an emotional wreck,
Outspoken on the surface cant keep feelings in check,
yet I love her more than a geek loves star trek
got me feeling like I'm ready to take the next step.

And If I had all the money in the world I'd spend it,
all to buy her stuff she like cause she so splendid,
see If this werent love it seemd more than friendship,
Kept me goin when I was down never needed no lemsip.

And I know sometimes I end up acting a little stupid,
Maybe even immature and childish like a school kid,
But if she trusts me I promise I’ll never abuse it,
I even dreamt of us getting married and havin two kids

Yeah that was cheesy but her favourite food's mozarella,
and the last time I saw her she looked really stellar.
I could picture us together like edward and bella,
but she just told me she got another fella

U still got it, don't worry.

'Yeah that was cheesy but her favourite food's mozarella'

That line just made me crack a smile

its pritty good bra... keep at it

Loving those bars, made me laugh here and there. Nice rhymes, nice flow. Certainly doesn't show you as rusty in the lyrics

true that jfam i agree

Thanks people :-) I appreciate it. Was just abit worried I might have lost my touch cause I was out of practice