mirrors image...

the mirror deflects and repells an image
and inside i see myself in hell finished
deshevelled and dimninshed, dark and tarnished
with the hardest of hearts and the blackest of charts
im the sadest from parts where the baddies are stars
no daddy material the truth is i fear you
stoned unsober a souless roller as cold as polar
poor pathetic, sick sadistic yet so poetic
a static artist - praying please guard this
give my regards to the gardens of love
pardon my pictures and letters belove
above all my gloves maybe covered blood
but beneath i speak of the pain to cease
underneath these lips, mouth and teeth
i can release afew terrible peices
decrease the function of the known cerabal
equiped with asumptions i will never pull
so severe my skull from these rotting two eyes
i can summerise my secret demise
with a dead disgue im mesmeroised
i thrust and twisted it killed it and kissed it
sweet complex bliss will you ever exist?
this dissed abyss is there only this?
drops of tears, cold skin and beers?
no human contact for 10 years?
what will appear but fearfull ghost?
this is my hell my own creation
i long for a cuddle, a loving senation
but i curl up into a frightened child
enlightened only by confused smiles
a heightened awareness of abused miles
the plight of myself in bruised denile
now look at the whose the evil hostile

Dude! I've never heard rap lyrics like these!
I mean, seriously ;O

hehe is that a good comment?

which line ya like the best?

this is my style - everythin i write about i try to keep true to reality...

its taken a hell of a long time to get right but after years ive writtin finally think im getting there!

YES!!

Dark and tarnished with the hardest of hearts and the blackest of charts lol xD

(when you said that...nick why I thought of Eminem lmfao!) and yeah man that's GOOD, I'm glad you do that. Bout time someone DOES xP

O'Rly? R u young? (I bet yah I'm younger..) and yes I think you are!! XD

im 26 ive been writtin since i was 16... i remember was supposed to be studyin for stupid exams and i was listenin to some hip hop instrumentals... and just decided to try it...

ive even saved some of the stuff i started with all those years ago and WOW is it RUBBISH!!!

its wierd now... i love recordin my own lyrics and listenin to them myself and its like... "omg... i wrote this! i made this!!!"

lol :P only thing is i keep it to myself all my mates would take the piss!

but its only in the past couple of years where ive started to get better not so much in terms of rhymin or word play but more with gettin the flow right and gettin some kinda story goin or somethin that makes sense - before it would just be the usual

"oh ive got a gun you better run" or... "watch your back cuz i rap and its wack like crack"

which i think anyone will agree is just pointless...

rappers like eminem are so popular because they can write lyrics about things that actually matter and are important to them - so i figured ill do the same... only im really ****ed up psychologically (LOL!) which is my lyrics always end up dark and kinda depressed... i like it that way its who i am :P

You know whut Danny, I like yew (lmfao not like that.)

N yeh, I fell in love with Eminem (****ing Justin B, If I was Eminem I would of slapped him by now!!!!!! Poor emi)

I saved quite a few songs I wrote and yeah, I sucked then.. Well.. I suck now, but I've improved lol xD

Thats what I need to work on! The rhythm and.. My damn vocabulary..

N I like the way you write it's inspiring xD
N yeah, those usual raps are getting quite.. Well, s****y
I want to FINALLY read rap lyrics that mean SOMTHING, not

"I'm in for the fame so learn the name"
-.- I'd be like "you lost me at fame, man.."

Nd, they may be a lil dark... But they are so damn good!!!! XD

lol! if your offerin me a record deal ill take it! haha!

after all...

"im in for the fame so learn the name...." LOL! :P

****in beiber and cheryl cole honest the mainstream music is appaulin...!

i always have trip hop / hip hop / dj instrumentals on loop on my ipod :P

thanks for da feedback anyways

U definitely got skills when it comes to writing, personally, I feel like it's a shame that you're rapping about dark shxt. U got a happy lyric or smt ? I'd like to read you again.

Originally Posted by dannyday58218195

lol! if your offerin me a record deal ill take it! haha!

after all...

"im in for the fame so learn the name...." LOL! :P

****in beiber and cheryl cole honest the mainstream music is appaulin...!

i always have trip hop / hip hop / dj instrumentals on loop on my ipod :P

thanks for da feedback anyways

O.o.. Lmao, I would if I could but.. I'm just a kid T-T...

BEIBER, STOLE both Eminem and Ushers rightful spot! (especially eminems!!!) He don't deserve s***!

Lol I will, hahaha xD

Really? That is so cool, I needa start hooken up meh iPad with my fav songs,


Nd your welcome, mate. Anytime haha xD

Molotova - id like to write somethin happy but lol :P nothin ever comes to mind!!! besides ya know the old sayin "write what you know"

I always want to write something happy and just random on occasions but I always seem to make something with a meaning. I wouldn't worry anyway, write what you know is always the best policy because it's real. That's why people like Eminem and others are good. All I say is good lyrics

thanks for the comment Jfam