still haven't found what i'm looking for

ok so my english teatcher at school told us to write down a poem that would conclude to the phrase "BUT I STILL HAVEN'T FOUND WHAT I AM LOOKING FOR". so i would like to see your critics and your opinion about my poem


I have wandered in the promise land
dead grownd, under god and fools
walking on water, drawning in sand
our shadows taller than our souls

Never to admit what had i mourned
shutting the blinds, i know you didn't see
No chance i took had i earned
never again to feel foreseen

I now look down on the sincerity of my fists
each twist following the one before
no path we took would we resisist
still haven't found what i'm looking for

The power of hope is never strong
no stone unturned did i leave
left in the mist of right and wrong
you know they forced me to believe

what can be said is not enough
you know it's all worth fighting for
drawning in water, walking on sand
still haven't found what i'm looking for

This is very good I think. The first line establishes the subject very nicely, and that is very important.

Since this is for school, may I offer a little help?

.. V1, L2: I think you want ground instead of grownd?

.. V1, L3: drowning not drawning, yes?

.. V2, L1: Never to admit what I had mourned
(in the next line it's good poetry to say "had I", but in this line it may be better to say "I had")

.. V3, L1: ... look down on the turmoil/tumult of my fists?
(or anxiety, anguish, misery, puzzlement, something that more clearly suggests clinching the fists or wringing the hands in sadness or regret?)

.. V5, L3: drowning

Very nice poetry, good luck with the assignment

thanks for your advice and corrections i kinda suck in dictation...