R Dot D

I dont know but I have fallen in love,
Your pretty like looking at the stars up above,
All I want is for you to love me back,
This is why I wrote this track,
Your love is so kind and pure,
I'm the poison and you are the cure,
Without you in my life,
I would not want to live anymore,
I want us to be together,
In love with you yea forever,
Your the ones name I shout,
Your the girl I always think about,
Always in love never in doubt,
I'm in love you know what I am about,
Baby without you in my life,
I'd rather die taken by a knife.

Baby you lift me off of my feet,
Everytime we kiss I miss a heartbeat,
You make me smile everytime we meet,
I wanna start again baby new sheet,
Because I want us to last,
All that bullshit it is in the past,
When I spit barz I spit them real fast,
Just in case I fall behind,
I love you babe because your so kind
When you hit me you know I dont mind,
When I'm with I lose my mind,
What I wanna say is I love you,
I know you love it when I hug you from behind,
I'm not making out baby it is true,
When I say I love you I'm speaking the truth,
So I wrote this song to you as proof,

To have you in my life I must be blessed
What I'd give to get you undressed,
I'm always sorry for when I get you upset,
But I am so glad that we met,
I will always remember you I will never forget,
All those day I kissed you on your neck,
And smelling that purfume that I like,
Producing these rhymes for you in a Mic,
I love it how you get so p*ssed,
And say f*ck off and sh*t I dont wanna be kissed,
Then the next day you tell me that I am missed,
Or asking for a fight so you put up your fists,
Then punch me straight on my arm,
Causing no pain and causing no harm,
I love it how you think you are hard,
You are babe my heart is permenatly scared.

I made it for my girlfriend tell me what you think? xxx

Sweet rap :-) Nice message and flowed pretty nice 2 im sure your girlfriend loved it. The rhyming is simple but in my view it works. Though I suggest starting to incorporate more complex rhymes and clever metaphors to take it up 2 the next level. Keep writing