A failed attempt at Colours of Your Heart

It's kind of a short poemy thing that fails to make sense. It's not really my style, but I'll upload this for Katie so she can see:

I may not be perfect,
But none of us are,
Now I'm back to square one,
Looking for a place to start

I take a step forward,
Why can't you see?
I'm tired of being lonely,
I'm so tired of being me,

Paint me a picture,
With rain from your soul,
Shatter the silence,
And make yourself whole

Collect up the pieces,
Before we fall apart,
Make a new image,
With the colours of your heart

I took a deep breath,
Entered the dream,
There I found freedom,
When I chose to redeem

I called out your name,
You murdered the gap,
You stared in my mind,
And drew out a map

Paint me a picture,
With rain from your soul,
Shatter the silence,
And make yourself whole

Collect up the pieces,
Before we fall apart,
Make a new image,
With the colours of your heart

Damn you!! That's way better than my attempt!!! :P

No way! Yours was a masterpiece!

Off topic: Wait, so I'm a member and a senior member?

Ha! In whose world?

And oh! Me too. When did that happen? :P And how is that possible?!

I've only had an account for like two weeks...

Same. I think we joined at about the same time... it's probably measured on activity

Yeah, and we've both posted a lot in this forum

Very true

I wasn't going to, but now I've nearly finished the music for this one

If you mean you wrote it just around the title and it´s not your style in spite of that it´s great lyrics!

That is what I meant, and thank you