Wake Up My Love

Yet another "struggle" that may not hit the mark at all. And this time I don't have a good handle on tune or style. The title has a double meaning, nothing hidden at all, just think about it.

This is a story
Of love's fallen glory
When two dying hearts
Tore each other apart
Like two mating tigers
In sensual delight
A scream and a nightmare
Of love drowned in spite

The best place to finish is at the beginning
Coz the end is enigma, just who was pretending
Or was it neither or both? What's there to decide
When nothing remains but two lovers who died
Their fall from the heavens didn't make a sound
Coz they were the biggest kept secret in town
I shouldn't be sad but it's hard to restrain
As I let the tears fall in unrequited rain

This is a story
of love's fallen glory
Two dying hearts
tore each other apart
But the dead are still walking
It can't be the end
Wake up you sleeper
And breathe life again

You let hardness rule when it suited your needs
But now is the time to relinquish the greed
Step out of the darkness that clamps like a vise
Let childish love unbreak that cold heart of ice
This isn't a war as for whom the bell tolls
It's all for reviving two sweet loving souls
There's no other choice if we want to survive
The only way out is a slice of the knife

This is a story
of love's fallen glory
Two dying hearts
tore each other apart
But the dead are still walking
It can't be the end
Wake up you sleeper
And breathe life again

The dead are still walking
It can't be the end
Wake up my love
And breathe life again
Wake up my love
And breathe life again

Originally Posted by MoonRide42

Yet another "struggle" that may not hit the mark at all. And this time I don't have a good handle on tune or style. The title has a double meaning, nothing hidden at all, just think about it.

This is a story
of love's fallen glory
Two dying hearts
tore each other apart
But the dead are still walking
It can't be the end
Wake up you sleeper
And breathe life again

The dead are still walking
It can't be the end
Wake up my love
And breathe life again
Wake up my love
And breathe life again

Great lyrics. I like chorus.

Thanks very much Hugo. I really struggled to turn this around and make the ending a little brighter than the beginning ... because I'm an optimist at heart? ... and the final chorus was the result.

Bumping this just coz I don't want another of my posts to be my "last" one

This is a really cool line "The best place to finish is at the beginning"

Thanks, and it didn't present itself till I'd struggled with the intro+chorus for 30 minutes or more. So maybe it came partly from the frustration of writing the first few lines? lol

Lol Now I want to write a song about frustration, or being stuck. Wait, Stacie Orrico beat me to it. Grr!

Originally Posted by MoonRide42

Thanks very much Hugo. I really struggled to turn this around and make the ending a little brighter than the beginning ... because I'm an optimist at heart? ... and the final chorus was the result.

Yeah. That´s my attitude too. Dark beginning and lighter end with a hope

I think adding 1 more verse to this lyrics will make this more better.... because for rap, lyrics need to be little longer .... using this lyrics one can sing a rap song for maximum 2:00 or 2:30 mins only , but I think songs minimum length should be at-least 3 mins...
see if you can add few more lines

Originally Posted by MiT

I think adding 1 more verse to this lyrics will make this more better.... because for rap, lyrics need to be little longer .... using this lyrics one can sing a rap song for maximum 2:00 or 2:30 mins only , but I think songs minimum length should be at-least 3 mins...
see if you can add few more lines

It's not rap.

sorry lol all I think about is presenting feeling in the form of rap XD ... so felt like this piece of lyrics can be used as rap lyrics XD
I like alternative rap in which rap is not about gangsta life/money, its about feelings , good things etc...

Thanks MiT for all your comments and no this isn't rap but I can see how you might wanta steer it that way. And yeah especially coz it would be a little different ... nice idea

Moon, You did it again, Beautifull. I love this piece man. Are you sure your middle name isn't abyss... cause you are deep man.

Good job. No matter what style of song. rap, r&b,rock, It goes.
thanks for the good read...

hehe... dunno y I always think about rap ROFL XD

Me Too MIT...It's on my brian always. I wake up in the morning thinking about it. Even somtimes when I dream. lol

Originally Posted by SK'nDeep

Me Too MIT...It's on my brian always. I wake up in the morning thinking about it. Even somtimes when I dream. lol

hehe.... lol I guess rap virus has infected our brains XD