Drowned Out Love

Here's a new one..feedback is always appreciated


Your anger could move mountains
My sorrow changes weather
Your jealousy is frightening
But my agony is better

There's been a gray sky overhead
Since you abandoned here
Those gray clouds turn to black
Whenever you come near

You sucked the love straight from my pores
Took the hate and anger too
Now the only things I feel
Are linked with thoughts of you

You split the oceans with your bitterness
Crack the earth's core with your scream
Threw my body down the middle
Now I'm floating down this stream

I allow myself to sink
Breathe the water into my lungs
Let it flow right through my veins
And drown myself of love

Great imagery and expression, I really like this! Is there a chorus among these verses? If not, I might suggest adding one, but on the other hand I think it flows and wraps so well that I would be afraid to recommend adding anything else, unless it was something that borrows from a couple of existing lines. This is really nice

Thanks! I've tried writing choruses to my lyrics before but it feels like I always ruin it when I do.

Yw, and I understand how that is, and the chorus is always the hardest for me to write. But it should be the most significant part of a song, at least musically. So sometimes I feel epic failure on that score too