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    Heres another one about my dad....the prick



    In 87 a child was neglected led to believe.
    Life was headed in the right direction but too young to perceive.
    Lifeís travesties actually happening right in front of his presence.
    Witnessing his father tossed in the back of the wagon locked up and arrested.
    By two men with badges and blue suits strapped with guns on their hip.
    He didnít have a ****ing clue his daddy was going to prison.
    For the evil sins he committed but what was this kid to envision.
    At first he thought this all was just a trick but every bit was authentic.
    Itís the beginning of chapter one an unfortunate bastard son.
    Stunned from departure from his father sorrow runs through his blood.
    The drama followed his heart turned hollow but what will come tomorrow.
    Life got harder through events of darkness its influence proved itís stronger.
    He useless from fighting through it loosing from the crudeness moving through Him.
    ruining prudence and accruing inner bruising.
    damn life is brutal this innocent kid is trying not to lose it.
    **** He just blew it now the only thing true to him.
    That he's been...

    Forsaken.... innocence has been taken.
    stripped from affection from his own relations.
    he's been Neglected in life and contrived a child.
    Heís dying he need salvation,,,he needs salvation.


    He needs friends and family constantly sticking by him.
    Like shadows behind following cause inside he's dieing.
    heís fighting but hardly surviving His emotions are dividing.
    like Dr. Jeckle and Hydeís hiding inside him.
    like duality two sides of personalities.
    split by this reality Mixed with a life of tragedies.
    why is this happening? Why does he collide from gravity.
    its like knives are stabbing him Causing all this pain and agony.
    creating internal anger lingering Pointing fingers.
    steering him to mingle with evil spirits and demons.
    serpents lurking till it changed him into another person.
    Pouring rainís making him suffer in pain digging up dirt.
    As he tunnels with this shovel formulating graves.
    In this downward funnel full of fury and hate until his life crumbled.
    Like he was played in vein of a ****ing video game.
    Like God is holding the controller of a mortal just controlling his fate.
    Either way he's been....

    Forsaken.... innocence has been taken.
    stripped from affection from his own relations.
    he's been Neglected in life and contrived a child.
    Heís dying he need salvation,,,he needs salvation...



    Deadbeat daddies leave their seeds on permanent vacations.
    It happened to me no visitation initiated...
    No see ya later declined mailed letters delivered to my attention.
    Just a kid neglected left with no Father to take care of him.
    And care for him and carry him through this life of impairment.
    Not knowing the steps of becoming a man **** this was embarrassing.
    But the hell with Him I did it all by myself with no help from him.
    Do you hear me Iím talking to you waste of an element.
    You sorry excuse for a Father donít bother trying to unite with us.
    You want to unite with something unite with deez nuts.
    I got the keys chump fling ya in a trunk your heads gonna bleed from.
    Giving you lumps when your head goes thump doing 80 over speed bumps.
    Yo Iíll feed ya to the fish cause prick I donít need ya.
    thick ropes and bricks around both Ankles and hips **** Iím gonna sink ya.
    to the bottomless pit cause your weights been On my shoulders.
    heavy like boulder back then I cringed but now that Iím older.
    Itís a synch life is golden with family and friends.
    but youíll never ****ing know them itís over finished diminished.
    so pay attention this is your lesson in negligence child molesting son of a *****.
    Now that thatís been said **** it Iím turning my direction from this.
    cause I was...

    Forsaken.... innocence has been taken.
    stripped from affection from his own relations.
    he's been Neglected in life and contrived a child.
    Heís dying he need salvation,,,he needs salvation..


    Gravity pulls him to the ground from holding grudges.
    Like Michael Douglas in ďFalling DownĒ but renown to Plummet.
    Amounting to nothing as a hellion a notorious felon.
    From grand theft and carelessness was his only form of rebellion.
    flaring up with rage Like blazing flames had to make a change.
    to rearranged His routine by means of both feet restrained.
    With shackles and chains No more rage or spray paint and gangs.
    There are better things to accept in life than violence and hate.
    Except for one thing that he hates with an exception.
    Every time he stares in the mirror he sees his daddyís ****ing reflection.
    Cursed with his genes off aggression he wish he could dissect them.
    With a method of extraction like the Nutty Professor.
    Cause his daddyís festering his blood and DNA irritating sections.
    Within his veins ever since that day he was arrested .
    should have been lethally injected But beware of this message.
    karma strikes 10 times harder ***** when itís least expected.
    From when I was...

    Forsaken.... innocence has been taken.
    stripped from affection from his own relations.
    he's been Neglected in life and contrived a child.
    Heís dying he need salvation,,,he needs salvation...



    Yeah this actualy happend. I wrote this out of grief too as you can see.

    You know the drill...

    Copyright 04/29/11
    Peace Love Empathy

    Sk'nDeep
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    SK'nDeep said:

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    anyone have any feed back?
    Peace Love Empathy

    Sk'nDeep
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    MiT said:

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    did this really happen ?
    well you've really got high level writing skill specially writing for rap lyrics ...
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    SK'nDeep said:

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    Thanks man.
    Peace Love Empathy

    Sk'nDeep