The Frozen Fire

Okay...So I've been writing a whole lot of crap lately. I've been listening to rock and ONLY rock lately. Especially Evanescence. And I think it's not doing any good to my inspiration, haha. But I really wanted to post something, so here it goes:

Hello, oh
We're here alone
So I'm gonna tell you a story

There was this princess
With her eyes emerald green
And her lips like the softest saphire
Can't dare to sing songs that have been
Sung by the flame of the frozen fire

-Chorus-
The frozen fire she never let burn
The one that holds all the words that will never be heard
The words that she chose to burn
In the frozen fire

The princess...
She was once crying
But you could never understand why

As she looked in the mirror
The tears were slipping on her gown
That moment, she finally knew clearly
That she could never take it down
And throw it into the frozen fire

-Chorus-
The frozen fire she never let burn
The one that holds all the words that will never be heard
The words that she chose to burn
In the frozen fire

Then there was
There was her prince
And now I see he resembled you

And he was gone just like you...oh...
Like the tears on her face, he was gone

-Chorus-
Into the frozen fire she had to let burn
Otherwise all her words would've never been heard
And they could've never burned
In a frozen fire

(Please don't ask if there's more to the story)

I'm missing
I'm missing you
Tonight I can't make up a story

Interesting choice of words I felt it was more like poetry. Very strange and interesting. I was a little lost on the flow of it. Probably because I wright nothing but rap songs. but I tried to imagine spoken word during your story and the chorus I imagined singing to it with a alternative metal style music. I would say it's definitely different. I'm not one to say it's awesome but it has a unique style to it. And that’s what I liked about it. Maybe needs a little tweaking here and there. Good job on the creative side of it.

Thank you for your comment. It's definitely not my best but I've been trough a terrible writer's block and I can't really write anything yet.

its good interesting i like it. i enjoyed the whole song. i could help you with your writters black if u want help

This is really good writing as always Angel, and also as always, meaningful and heart-rending. And again no real critical/constructive comments, just want to say that your best is always pure excellence, and this is no exception, it's really good just like I said