The Fighter

The fighter's eyes are clear
And he wears a smile
As he meets the day
And nods at friends along the way

He walks straight with pride
Just like everyone said;
He'd be fine ...
He'd be just fine, in time

I love only you, she'd cried
And the stars seemed so bright...

But now his vision blurs
As pangs of memory
Make his thoughts go dark
And hit him square in the heart

The last fight put him under
Thought he'd never see again
He crawled out to the street
And lay in the cold cold rain

I love only you, she cried...

But now his vision blurs
As the painful memories
Make his thoughts turn dark
And kick him in his heart

Remembering bright blue sky...
And two dark closets
With doors open wide
And the unused broom just inside

And his legs grow weak
As he crumbles inside
From the 10-ton weight
The cold dead weight of his fate

I love only you, she'd cried
And the moon seemed so bright...

But his vision blurs
As the painful memories
Make his thoughts go dark
And punch him straight in the heart

He wanted so much to believe
But too many black holes
Little lies were a disease
That still eats his soul

And his eyes close
As unbearable visions
Make his thoughts go dark
And punch him straight in the heart

And his eyes close
And his eyes close

So does this one make the point, or anything even close? Yes/no?

Deep righting moon. I think it make a point. wow. expressive as hell man. creative.diffrent..I likes...

Thanks!!! It's always great to get positive feedback from such obviously talented writers as yourself. This is another one that I really want to set to music, if I can ever get the right equipment again. Times are so hard right now

if i coprihended right she cheated on him or something?
i really like this.
it speaks to me on a level i dont yet understand, and for some unknown reason a single tear formed in my eye.
thats been happening alot while reading so many of the forums good lyrics, like this one.
agan great job

He walks straight with pride
Just like everyone said;
He'd be fine ...
He'd be just fine, in time

*tear* it's so deep...plain beautiful. it does certainly make a point.

Eams, thanks a bunch for "feeling" it like that ... and well let's just say, theoretically speaking, she didn't necessarily cheat but she left too many shadows and too many doors open and didn't seem to care (the unused broom) and it just threw doubt and confusion all over the place, and all of that caused serious problems that ended it. How's that for an explanation/revelation?

Originally Posted by LyricsAngel

He walks straight with pride
Just like everyone said;
He'd be fine ...
He'd be just fine, in time

*tear* it's so deep...plain beautiful. it does certainly make a point.

Thanks so much Angel, and yeah those lines, holding himself up on the outside like everyone expects, but that's not at all what's happening on the inside.

Thanks again all of you for commenting and for the encouragement

I'm astonished, this is excellent!

"I love only you, she cried..."

My favourite part.

Wow - this is really powerful...I would really like to hear it with music. What kind of music do you write? What genre?

Thanx very much Zakynthos and Jenna. As for your question Jenna, most often I feel or write a lyric as either Rock, Power Metal, Deep House or occasionally Trance. But this one was written as a country/folk ballad. That list of choices may sound strange coming from one person, but today I posted something in the "How's your mood? Told thru music" thread that should explain where I'm coming from....2 great versions of the same song:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VDXla23ZVQ0
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-HUAR5FVuoM

I just love good music, no matter what mold it fits into.