This is beautiful...I like where this is going. If it was me writing this I have an example below.
I write rap. so I'm not sure what style of music this was written to.. Nice job..Feel free to use anything I wrote...
(Verse 1)
The thought,
makes my heart,
start to quake
Just a whisper
I love her more
than she cares to see
Is it just me?
her beauty is the Abyss
my love runs deep and I can’t resist her
But it's more,
can't you see?
Connected by hearts
We're meant to be,
and it's tearing me apart
internally Suffering for eternity
Peace Love Empathy
Sk'nDeep