betrayed

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  1. quickill said:

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    this is me
    now who the **** are you
    everything i thought i knew about you turns out untrue

    i ain’t really changed much
    yeah it’s still the same me
    you you went and changed up
    from somethin that you used to be
    somethin that we used to have
    used to come so easily
    everything can fade to black
    excuses used so stupidly
    you’re wearin thin on no patience
    pushin all the wrong buttons
    tried to give you due warnin
    but you insist to start somethin
    never took a ****in clue
    can’t give me my damn space
    pushin til your arms tired
    guess until i’m pushed away
    you can blame it all on me
    in spectacular fashion
    i was blamed for everything
    so this is how it really happened
    i don’t wanna start over i don’t wanna make up
    you say all we do is fight
    i’m startin not to give a ****
    but i can’t vent my real feelins
    i know you wouldn’t understand
    i shout these words to no one really
    just to get it off my chest
    but it got me impressed
    how we stuck it out for so long
    used to think we were blessed
    cursed i got it all wrong
    is this love cuz this hurts
    screamin til my voice gives
    or at least for all that it’s worth
    or till i just don't give a ****

    between the screamin and the arguin the insults and text message
    how we stuck it out for this long never quite what i expected
    would’ve bailed out long ago somethin told me push through
    but all of this for no reward now i’m doubtin me and you
    give it time give it space watchin as the hours pass
    tomorrow brings a new day watch you fade to my past
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    Tre_fly said:

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    I don't really see a flow in this at all, but you got a subject, and a decent start to your rhymes. Keep messin with it and it can end up being good. Use more internal rhymes, alliterations, ect.
    "What we think, we become." Buddha