Not like you (beggining writers original song)

uhh hey this is my first time posting a song i wrote so... here it is i guess. im not acting like i dont care im just nervous. hope i can at least entertain someone out there. enjoy


You sit in the dark, a bottle in your arms
wondering why this happened to you
you make excuses and say it wasnt your fault
but all this pain was caused by you

You blame everything, you blame the world
the one that is so cruel, the one you try to rule
I hear that its not fair but i am also there
and I wont turn out like you... not like you

Cheats and lies, it was so wrong
blood stained our hands all day long
this path was one, i didnt want to walk
I had to stop before i was like...

You blame everything, you blame the world
the one that was so cruel, the one you tried to rule
I hear it wasnt fair but i was also there
and i didnt turn out like you... not like you

You sit in the dark, a needle in your arm
slipping away from what happened to you
as you see the light, you realize
that all you pain, was caused by you

You blamed everything, you blamed the world
the one that was so cruel, the one you failed to rule
I heard it wasnt fair but i was also there
and i wont die.. die like you
not like you


k so thats it everybody hope you like it. and i am still a complete beginner so any tips and advice are apreciated.

It good just needs a little work. Keep writing and it your writing will become better and better.

This is good. It has potential to be a great lyric, just like you have potential to be a great lyricist. There are some grammar issues and the flow is a little hard to understand, but some of my work started out that way, and some still is. Keep going, and I'm looking for your posts now, M.H!