Getting over you, may take a while

Pillows aren't made, to absorb your tears,
But I can't help it, if you ignore me, for the rest of my years.
I thought that, you were the one that my heart would chase,
But all I want, is for my feelings to now all erase.

Eating, sleeping, is all impossible, without thinking about your, brown eyes,
I'm always the one, who notices you, but why won't you just realize?
Breathing, without you, is the hardest thing I've ever done,
Wishing that I am, more important than just " that someone "

I just wanna show you,
There is nothing in the world, that you can do.
To unlock my heart from yours,
You can't even close, these open doors
Seeing your sweet face, just raised 1 more smile,
Finally getting over you, may take a while

Rainy days, just emphasize the fact, that your not mine,
Putting on smiles, to act like I'm, better than fine.
I Love the way, you hold your hips when you stand,
Drifting apart, is the bit that I will never understand

Trying to impress you, isn't so successful as it seems,
There is no point, in surrounding yourself in your own dreams.
Escaping from this world, is hard to do alone,
I'm certain your heart is just 100% stone.

I just wanna show you,
There is nothing, in the world that you can do.
To unlock my heart from yours,
You can't even close these open doors
Seeing your sweet face, just raised 1 more smile,
Finally getting over you, may take a while

I can't get your attention, without embarrassing my soul
I'm guessing, my heart will never again be whole.
My one wish, would be to hold your rosy face,
And find out exactly, how your lips taste.

I just wanna show you,
There is nothing in the world that you can do.
To unlock my heart from yours,
You can't even close these open doors
Seeing your sweet face, just raised 1 more smile,
Finally, getting over you, may take a while

Someday, I hope you will see me, in a different light,
And explain, that all along I was right,
I'm just saying, getting over you, may take a while.

You really write nice songs SophieB. I just have a minor correction for you.

Originally Posted by sophieB

Eating, sleeping, is all impossible, without thinking about your brown eyes,

Rainy days, just emphasize the fact, that you're not mine, (you are)

You have more commas than necessary, but it looks like you put them to indicate pauses in the music, am I correct?

Yeh, the commas are slow pauses in the music, so the listener could understand what the rhythm was like, and thank you very much for commenting

wow this is good its kinda sad. is this song about it. it sounds like a song someone writes when they feel it. i think this is better then alot fo my songs

Thanks so much for commenting, Yeh all of my songs are about what I have experienced or going through, I sound like a saddo really. I never thought my songs were good, but my friend thought differently, don't say that! Everybody's songs are great! Thanks again

very nice. i like the form of the rythem. and i connected to this, because of the same reasons you most-likely wrote this song. it's goor, your friend was right, you do write well.
i as well write out of emotion as you do, i feel it help the reader feel the words they are reading. instead of just reading them. anyway, i like it

Thank you for commenting, most people just read the lyrics without doing anything. Thank you

i know people like never comment my songs and im like well was it good or not

yeup. it happens.