Heres Some a My Rhymes

Sorry bout the language, i edited it though. This song is a ruff version and its around the rythem of chamillionaire's "Ridin". Same beat, same rythem. Once again sorry for the language, i covered it p mostly though. Im waitin for someone to give me a good title to it. Remember this is my rough version. Im editin right now.



"Fight Night"


"Chrous"
That boy wanna fight so i give to him,
this sucka tryin beat me but i,
i block his jab and givem an uppa cut,
he bleedin fast and he say "what the f**k!"
i just laugh at you and i spit on ya face,
by now u runnin all ova the place,
i let ya run, i already kicked ya a**,
no need to waste time again,
u picked up fast,
by ya stupid crew,
i yell "dont come back or i beat yo to!"


Come on man, ya think ya can beat me!
Yo u couldnt fight if ya really floated like a butter and stung like a bee,
you think you tough, but i think you just pathetic,
you think your cool, but it think u just a minor tick,
suckin power, from the people around you,
u need ya crew just ta beat two,
ya couldnt win against my lil sis, how old is she?
Man shes six.

"Chorus" x2

Come on fight,
Come on fight,
ya think ya tough,
but come on fight,

Reapeat x3

[music fades away]

it was OK, some suggestions; finish thoughts dont just end them, also crew...

'by ya stupid crew,
i yell "dont come back or i beat yo crew to!" '

u dont have to say crew again there, you can leave it - but its just un needed repetition

Originally Posted by theUsed13

it was OK, some suggestions; finish thoughts dont just end them, also crew...

'by ya stupid crew,
i yell "dont come back or i beat yo crew to!" '

u dont have to say crew again there, you can leave it - but its just un needed repetition

Thanks a lot yo. This will help.

Yo anyone readin give some title request. Ive payed along with it and i cant decide.

Try "Fight Night" for a title

Originally Posted by Sewn Up

Try "Fight Night" for a title

Nice idea man. I think thats gonna be my top choice.

Name it "Sucka Punch"