Some bars I made. Criticism is wanted. Oh and advice too.

First dose of hip hop's the Illmatic, and i'm still at it, /14
creating lines like a coke addict but it's so tragic, /14
how under grown faggots make the blown status,/11
known on the whole atlas, gain fame off the slow crackheads./13
No wonder it's so backwards how rap is goin downwards. /14
I mix and use profound words to bring back old standards, /13
The eighties crack invasion got rap facing hazards./13
Materialistic shits got the game staggered.


Those numbers on the end are just syllable counts. It's for me to help the flow.

any feedback?

Nice short script

Got real nice flow and wordplay here. Keep at this one

Thanks for the feedback. Helps a lot.