Smoothtung vs DuceDaMicRipper

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Okay Its so-played to throw-away 'fresh' for Insults,
Ive slayed 'text-finesse' - straight off-'freshest' impulse.
Dismay 'duce'-may play, unbrave, and stray - not indulge,
But fray/ stay convulsed, as my draped 'page' raid engulfs.

Consult ~
and Pencil me a first round victory emm please?
My sleek delivery's sweet - perp's 'ground' 'bitter/beat emcee'.

Im thick into trickery, but yet pick with reasoning...
My crisp scripts kiss off the lips as you read them.
And slip/run slick tungs like feed when I shriek them...
Which tung? This one... - ...quite chic like parisians;

Like 'mick' swung - rip tons in e-ver-y season...
ZIP's.. ~ '1' - kid, 'tung' is heavenly pleasing.

rhymes so fly that they are mass appealing
smooth spits pies in the sky not succeeding
against this M.C. filled with so much feeling
that i energize the ground to bounce and hit the ceiling
so get a grip and fix your mind on the lines your recieving
i define reason with flow that has meaning
dirty-south style the way I have the whole board leaning
towards Duce as the victor of this battle verse 'you'
exceeding limitations in compairison, I'm 'converse'
while 'smooth' is nothing more than a 'pay-less' shoe

Now since you went homie, go again to kick off the second round of drops

still untested in battle your behavior is channeled agresticly through _sbu
as if you rest in his shadow

upset with yourself because you can't be him and thats why pusillanimous
asholes like you wont win
facin off against a savage beast like me who eats emcees that endulge in skullduggeries
but I'm down for the challange

to go to war with this rhyme thief, thread creep, who cheats due to his fear of defeat
nearly reaching my peek

as I put my skills into action teaching this geek uh lesson
in aggressive pursuit
which my actions counter balance fraudulent talents exposing the truth
of this smooth posing rhyme spitter

claiming valid reigns inside the studio booth back slash dash nothing of use

as I bring round two to a close
leaving smooth mentally black and blue
shedding light on reality with an 'F' and uh' 'U'

'_sbu'? ...Yo - ...Let's speak the truth.
I address this to you but devote this to proof.
No 'duce' Im genuine. I've wrote like I'm supposed to.
My flow's illumined - ...apparently enough to coax you.

You're so rude and blow too - I'm done with your piece,
After all the sh*t I wrote you... how low can you steep?
I'm understanding battle terms but 'roasting' is cheap,
F*ck a straggled sperm an grapple turns... I flow in my sleep.

You 'shed' light? Really 'g'? I hope that's its sun cast..
The only 'light' you'll see is the sparks from my gun blast.
I'm opening seems in your mettling heart an all,
With both deftly speed, and a deadly arsenal.

'DuceDaMicRipper' you've unsettling carpal.
I'll 'rip' the 'Mic' from 'duce' and 'rip' into carnal.
I've seen better flair to be shared at a carnival.
And this dude is talkin more p*ssy than cher articles.

Still untested in battle your behavior is channeled agresticly through _sbu
as if you rest in his shadow
**great line right there. It impressed me honestly (hurt the most)**

upset with yourself because you can't be him and thats why pusillanimous
asholes like you wont win
**this line had potential, good substance but could have had a better punch**

facin off against a savage beast like me who eats emcees that endulge in skullduggeries
but I'm down for the challange
**nice..but I would have ended it with 'skullduggeries'**

to go to war with this rhyme thief, thread creep, who cheats due to his fear of defeat
nearly reaching my peek
**eh.. could be stronger**

as I put my skills into action teaching this geek uh lesson
in aggressive pursuit
which my actions counter balance fraudulent talents exposing the truth
of this smooth posing rhyme spitter
**should have ended after 'truth' .. good punch that way**

claiming valid reigns inside the studio booth back slash dash nothing of use

as I bring round two to a close
leaving smooth mentally black and blue
shedding light on reality with an 'F' and uh' 'U'
**not bad but you got sicker substance, could've wrapped it up better**


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Overall not a bad drop. Should have edited a few times tho. (I do it on just about every script)
You get a feel for where a flow went wrong and can be strengthened that way.

I will to this with every opponent, all in means of progressing. Not required but encouraged they do the same thing

Breaking bars and punches ftown pike that, wither with someone else's script or your own, truly helps a lot

Breaking bars and punches down like that, wither with someone else's script or your own, truly does help a lot