Original rap lyrics

Thread: Original rap lyrics

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  1. CheesyBacon said:

    Default Original rap lyrics

    A place to post your original lyrics, advise each other on how to improve them. Please don't be rude, this is not a battle thread. It's for constructive criticism only.

    Here's my opener:

    Too many people vindicate discrimination in this nation,
    makes me wonder why there's no retaliation.
    We are all equal, end the hate and advocate a new foundation
    on which we can build for future generations.
    We should provide the education and a little inspiration
    to the younger members of the population,
    because it's us to whom they listen, not their teachers or their parents
    or the lies they're fed by corrupt politicians.
    My observations of today are that most kids just want away
    and find some way to release all of their frustrations.
    Then altercations start to play out 'cause these kids are led astray
    and I believe it's down to lack of information
    about the system that's behind it, the system they should be fighting,
    the system led by guys in suits all hiding
    behind religion, gender, race and all the other forms of hate
    that leave most people in irate conditions, blinded.
    These sociopathic power addicts take advantage of the fact it
    takes an average man a whole life-time to manage
    to get a sense of realization of the game that he's been playing,
    simply mindlessly obeying to his damage.
  2. killanatural said:


    hey youre from yahoo answers right?
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    Mixalopoulos said:


    Sorry Yung Cheezy, but the first six lines aren't rap.

    All you've done is just rhyme the ends of the lines.

    Take a look at this video on how to write a sixteen bar verse.

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  4. CheesyBacon said:


    @killanatural - yeah I'm there too.

    @mixa - I'm pretty sure it is rap. I didn't just rhyme ends of lines. eg: "vindicate" rhymes with "end the hate", "people" and "equal", "wonder" and "build for". Not only that but I made every 2 lines contain 29 syllables so that it keeps a flow when you spit it over a straight 4-4 beat. And as far as that video goes I can't watch it. Youtube is banned in China.
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    Mixalopoulos said:


    Quote Originally Posted by CheesyBacon View Post
    Youtube is banned in China.
    SOPA kai PIPA, tora ston internet, ti na kanoume, gamoto!
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