Haiku

Depth within your heart
Is hard to rhyme but I'll try
I hope this will do

Welcome to the thread, Doug - looking good! Here's a good, short introduction to haiku:

http://www.webexhibits.org/poetry/ex..._examples.html

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

Depth within your heart
Is hard to rhyme but I'll try
I hope this will do

You're funny, Doug! As you can see, there are several other light, humorous haiku! So, on this thread, we welcome it!
And you got 5-7-5!!! Good job.
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I hope this will do
White tablecloth on the ground
Wine, food, sparkling eyes

Originally Posted by VivaPalestina

With 3,266 views, I've made the thread sticky to get more contributions. Welcome Doug, nice work - normally the second line is the longest (syllable count 7) though.

Noor, I don't think the "sticky" stuck! It doesn't show on my screen anyway. Thanks.

Originally Posted by Frankie Jasmine

Noor, I don't think the "sticky" stuck! It doesn't show on my screen anyway. Thanks.

Maybe someone else unstuck it

Urgh Ola, it was your cue. Did I really have to deal with sparkling eyes?

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Wine, food, sparkling eyes,
twelve seated, a painting made
The Last Supper

My cue? I don't follow you. I could've dealt with sparkling eyes but not wine and food, thanks for removing the necessity.

Since you chose to finish with 4, I'll do a 4-6-4:

the last supper
for homo sapiens:
about to end

I waited for you to avert it, didnt realise you didnt want to deal with it too.

About to end,
silver wisps appear
Night closes

Ah. Yeah, it was the wine and the food, sparkling eyes I could have dealt with.

night closes
about you and me
crimson sky

It was the whole combination for me, Frankie's haiku are always too cheerful for me. And yours just make me want to not ruin it with whatever my fingers write next.

Crimson sky
burning orange flames
bleeding tears

Between a rock and a hard place, eh? Yeah, I'm generally not much into cheerfulness either, so I suppose it's good Frankie brings it to the table. Back to 4-6-4:

bleeding tears
carry me to my love
let me hold her

Isnt she a doll. What would ATL be like without that little ray of sunshine

Let me hold her
count the stars in her hair
braid diamonds

Indeed.

braid diamonds
with mithril teardrops
into Being

into Being
you breathe life into me
I become

Oh, Noor, 5-7-5 is so much easier. For you (but not to you), I'll break the "cheerful" mode! . . . 4-6-4:

Into Being
The -estest of the -est
Egocentric

Oh nohs, two ladies to please again! Ahh, the bane of my existence!...

I become
egocentric now
forgive me

Such a ladies man Ola.

Sorry Frankie I like the little senryu Ola comes up with, so I keep forcing the syllable count down

Forgive me
for every tear
I caused

Oui, mademoiselle

I caused
the effect:
you

Confession: I only play this game so that I can read what you come up with

you
centre of
my world

Counterconfession: I doubt I'd contribute much unless you did. You're very stimulating.

my world
vessels of
love