Haiku

Thread: Haiku

Tags: None
  1. Guest said:

    Default

    Whoops! Our haiku overlapped. What to do now?
    Whoever posts first, wins
     
  2. Frankie Jasmine's Avatar

    Frankie Jasmine said:

    Default

    Quote Originally Posted by OrchestraInside View Post
    There is a myriad of possibilities... 'Overcome me, dark', 'Darkness upon us' - remember, often you don't need to use a verb at all, which is rather particular for haikus, and opens up many possibilities.
    Oooooo! I love, 'Overcome me, dark'!! That's "me." Thank you very much. I also need to practice thinking outside the box.

    I will remember that verbs are not necessary in haiku. Now I'll be practicing on both of these points. Thank you for the advice.

    The senryu would then read:

    Whispers in the light
    Signal intimate moves when
    Overcome me, dark
     
  3. VivaPalestina's Avatar

    VivaPalestina said:

    Default

    Quote Originally Posted by Frankie Jasmine View Post
    Wow! Beautiful, Noor!
    I can never get enough compliments Thank you dear

    Sorry, I saw Ola's one first so carried it on - I also didnt like my first poem so spent a while editing the second line
     
  4. Guest said:

    Default

    I'm going to go crazy with alliteration on this one

    wispy windswept stalks
    sway in silent rhapsody
    represent the meek
     
  5. VivaPalestina's Avatar

    VivaPalestina said:

    Default

    Race against time now that we're three It's all yours Frankie
     
  6. Frankie Jasmine's Avatar

    Frankie Jasmine said:

    Default

    Represent the meek
    Who cry out not for pity
    With enduring strength
     
  7. Guest said:

    Default

    With enduring strength
    howl the hurricanes in us
    deep inside
     
  8. VivaPalestina's Avatar

    VivaPalestina said:

    Default


    Deep inside
    shadows flickering
    gnarled trunks


    Urgh I'm going to start spelling centre all wrong because of this forum
     
  9. Guest said:

    Default

    If you go advanced, no need to spell it at all. Too many clicks for your taste?
    I'm feeling short tonight.


    Gnarled trunks
    by the shore
    wild
     
  10. VivaPalestina's Avatar

    VivaPalestina said:

    Default

    I'm as lazy as they come. I love short.


    Wild
    Your eyes
    Gone
     
  11. Guest said:

    Default

    Gone.
    Was it
    ever?

    (Feel free to drop the question mark!)
     
  12. VivaPalestina's Avatar

    VivaPalestina said:

    Default

    Does punctuation carry on?


    Ever?
    She felt
    hope
     
  13. Guest said:

    Default

    Let's agree to drop punctuation if we want to.


    hope
    smiled
    alone

     
  14. VivaPalestina's Avatar

    VivaPalestina said:

    Default




    Alone,
    silver
    listens
     
  15. VivaPalestina's Avatar

    VivaPalestina said:

    Default

    What I really wanted to say was about a silent silver sphere hanging in orbit seeing and hearing everything, a quiet observer, but the syllable count just ever so slightly impeded me.
     
  16. Guest said:

    Default

    Don't let it; you could have said


    alone
    silver sphere
    listens
     
  17. Guest said:

    Default

    listens
    hearing not
    a thing
     
  18. VivaPalestina's Avatar

    VivaPalestina said:

    Default


    A thing
    of such might:
    Your smile
     
  19. Guest said:

    Default

    your smile
    with me
    now
     
  20. Frankie Jasmine's Avatar

    Frankie Jasmine said:

    Default

    Your smile
    Caresses soul, fondles heart
    Every time


    Too slow again . . .